All Comments on 'Son's Rise Ch. 02'

Seakeg, the only thing you have to be aware of in your writing is, you have to stop using British names of female parts when you really mean to use American ones. I assume this because it takes place in the states.

You use "bum" a lot when it should really be "ass."

Also, in this installment, you use Derek when it should've been Josh during the sex scene with his mother.

Great story and I thank you for the anal. I can't wait for the next installment.

Keep up the good work.

Cheers.

Make her a cum slut for her son's cock, craving his cum and wanting to fuck him all of the time. Thanks for the chapter........Rich

I was not phased in the least by your use of the word "bum". In fact, "bum" is just a much less coarse way of saying "ass" and because the mom wasn't really a foul mouthed slut, I might expect her to say "bum", especially before things heat up. As well, it kind of bugs me that a few folks think we should write in a manner that suits their narrow knowledge and usage of the english language. I'm not saying that this is the case with the "bum" comment but I have noticed that sometimes, there seems to be little tolerance for taking a more international bend to the language. Personally, I enjoy regional inflection.

Keep writing.

I like this, it's fucking hot stuff!

Just Want to point out, the narrative changed from josh to derek and then back to josh. got me confused mid stroke

Sissy little fucks just like those yanks who thinks they invent english.