All Comments on 'Spellman Ch. 06'

Great story so far..

Need to get to the Amanda situation. Story pace is starting to drag a bit, maybe longer chapters?

I like the pacing. The story is progressing nicely. Looking forward to the next chapter!

What about Riley? It is hard for me to believe she would just disappear.

Riley will either be related to the childhood friend or the gym buddy

Progressing as expected, an increasing number of cast members enabling more twists and turns to the story. Also giving little insights to the story line, between all the sexual activity.

Trust me anon, I expect Riley to reappear somewhere in the future. Possibly involving Melissa and that swimming pool she was photographed near in her bikini. D

Oh you are a tease, now now Ryan’s mum is in the picture! ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

You set up tons of females, but some of Ryan's attraction rests on how much is between his legs and somehow that's all the females in the story can think about? That's too difficult to believe. To top it off, even Ryan's mom suggests or at least thinks Melissa and Tori coming to Ryan's place for dinner is a default threesome. While they did discuss potential pitfalls at work, it feels like thinly-veiled window dressing: instead of Ryan trying to find a meaningful relationship, he's mindlessly moving from female to female, and now checking out the cute Korean (Gina) who somehow isn't offended and allowed him to check out her ass? Sorry, but a lot of this just feels wrong, and not even a former girlfriend should be "ok" with him giving her friend a facial. Just doesn't fit. 2

Well he still hasn't reconnected with Beth . She may be the with with it all . Brains , Companioship support , soul mate . I think there is going to be an interesting situation between Beth ands Riley .

Geez CMT82 . You sure are a skeptic . Even though you are wrong . This is realistic . It is still fiction and is very mild compared to most of the stories on LIT . Fiction means it is supposed to be believed . In the world of the author . It is one thing to have corrective critism . And quite another to claim his tale isn't reasonable . In fiction the author would ask that you indulge his offer to share his otherworldly take on each story . He is the professional . Knowing what he is doing . Not just guessing at what sounds right . Offering his works free for our reading pleasure .

If you can't like it or agree with it . Either STFU or don't read it . You have crossed over to the direspectful comments . No one wants to hear it .

I forgot to mention . He is going to freak out when Paul hits on him .

@pk2

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Tbh after reading both this story and others over the last few years I’ve found myself agreeing with Commentarista82 and his comments on stories more often that not, he’s pretty much on the ball with this one too, our MC is a bit two dimensional, certainly not showing the maturity you’d imagine a Teacher ought to have, he’s almost a Jock stereotype, apart from his previous faithfulness and liking of poetry. Character development and scene setting/world building is essential in a fictional story, it makes us the reader invest emotionally with the characters involved, this story has really only done that for Tori so far, I’m reading on and hoping that our MC develops further into a proper human being, along with the magical mystery tour of hot young women that populate his life seemingly.

Enjoying

This is pretty hot. So far, a lot of fun, and light, for the most part. Love the series so far.