by LoneCoyote
So many questions about the nature of war and where it is taking us. Perhaps a new life conceived in such dark times can be considered a small symbol of hope for our species.
Your writing is amazing very brilliant , but it was not an erotic story but rather a sad one. This is a place were I hope to feel more... umm happy feelings, but I vote five stars because of your writing talent, and hope you use it wisely next time ;).
On one hand, the theme is an old, often duplicated story. On the other hand, you do a good job, and I will always read another.
Personally, I would have taken her with me, as a hostage?
This could go on forever; using her in different ways for different purposes. Use her as a decoy? Use her as a bargaining tool? Maybe she has a daughter in the story you can use a a lever to control her. In summary, I liked it
You create a world that is interesting and comprehensible, without spending too much time setting the scene.
Then you go on to hit three of my favorites: rape in war, forced witness, and tomboys! Well done!
And the ending made me laugh, which I think was your intention. Five stars.
I hope you'll check out my stories too! You might like Traffic Stop.