All Comments on 'Spring and a Mistress Ch. 01-03'

The grammar was kind of sloppy. The shifts between first person (his), third person with names, and third person without names made the story hard to follow around the beginning of Page 2, and I was relieved that you settled back into the third person without names at the end. (SOOOO much easier to follow!) Other than that, a good story, easily a 75 (if not a 100) if the errors are corrected.

Please write a sequel!