All Comments on 'Squeaky Outdoors'

That was an awesome story.

you need to write more!

good story but you only get 50%rating because you never finished the story we need to know what happens do the parents find out if so what do they say do they continue do they go to college together do they move to an appartment together all these are missing from your story and would have raised your rating if you had continued

I am sorry it was so so...

there was very little detail. I was going what on every time it went on and on. I pretty certain people avoid this one. But if your thinking of ways for people to get more readers try to reread it over and over again. because for me...you don't have observer saying what going on? got two people making out in back of what kind of car? I Don't know? First all what sort of description were people? All I got was you had a big family that came over and you decided to go to what sort of place public place? I don't have clear picture what happening to me its circus of events. I don't get how you put raft in back of station wagon honestly unless you put back of seats down. Story itself did not make sense at all.

I trying my best not sound sarcastic but way it sounded squeaky outdoor I was hoping for really kicker story but it felt like flat noted story. Try to work on that story...I don't have any right now to think about it.

I love brother sister stories. I sure wish I had a sister.

keep on writing.

short and sweet sequels

two or three sequels are must

Would love to see more of these twos adventure. Very nice story line.