All Comments on 'Stable Boy'

Puck a tense present or past, and edit for it. I recommend past. My mind resists the second person. Try it as first or third. Theres no antagonism here. Why is this dangerous, taboo, what threatens to interrupt the pleasure. What is the antagonist to the character's desire? Sometimes it's as simple as, he doesn't know if he can satisfy or perform. Build some anxiety doubt, or fear into it describe the characters. What specifically is so special about her ass besides size. There are lots of big asses no one wants to see he has a couch. What's it look like, feel like . You know. Get into it. Have fun. Don't be afraid to sound corny or cliche