All Comments on 'Stand for Love Ch. 06'

Stunning piece of writing ...

I so want to find out what it is that is making Victoria and Jakes family hare Adrian so much... There is something more than Nicholas that is causing it. The two mothers remind me of bitter harpies out of greek mythology.

PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE let Adrian get away from the poisonous family and find someone that believes on him and loves him for who he is. "Love is not love that alters when alteration find..."

What happened to police and a proper investigation? The little bottle would have been proven to be covered by Victoria's prints and enven Jakes mother's ... NOT Adrians. what is it with this member of staff? Who is she and what connection???

Why was there no one listening to the doctor? I poison acted strange as if it had not gotten into the whole sytem. If it had been in the soup then it would have affected the system. Noah is he trully a doctor???? How did he miss this simple fact???

Does Nicholas really love Adrian? He was quick to turn against him, if he loved him then he would have beleived him and not gone with his mother. There is no proof against Adrian and yet he hates him so... has he forgotten she could be wallowing in prison with Jake and his family had it not been for Adrian?

How anyone sane thinks this is good writing is beyond me. Let's see what's bad about this story, shall we?

- why the fuck did Nicholas think it was such a good idea to let Adrian live in the same house AS HIS FUCKING ABUSER WHO ALSO TRIED TO KILL HIM. GOD, MOVE OUT AND GET YOUR OWN HOUSE YOU FUCKING RETARD, FUCKING MOMMA'S BOY. MY GOD.

- Really? They're picking up possible evidence up WITHOUT GLOVES. THE POLICE STILL NEEDS TO COLLECT THAT FOR FINGER PRINTS. HOW FUCKING STUPID CAN YOU BE.

- Nicholas would rather see his husband be treated like dirt for months than have Jake in prison? Really????

- Food poisoning =/= regular poisoning. Stop using these terms in the same way. Putting poison in food is not food poisoning. http://www.healthline.com/health/food-poisoning

- Also that is not how hospitals work.

If I had to list every single thing wrong with this story then I'd still be writing next week. Just, stop writing now and save yourself from more embarrassment.

i dont even know where you came from but,dont say such as thing if at all you're not interested in his story leave dont the fuck be stupid lyk jake

i wonder how you even get the guts to the fuck blar blar"stop writing......."

u people are filthy,instead of appreciating you just demoralise FUCK YOU,I HOPE U READ THIS AND IT PINS SOME SENSES IN YOUR FREAKY HEAD

if ure so hurt,then write yours and be perfect BULL SHIT

Anyway nick annoyed me already so please dont worsen it

vanalas,we really loved it although nick annoyed

plz put him into his place,this time make adrian brave and let him yell at them

it sound weird but i want adrian to leave such that nick gets it in dat damn head,,lyk marcos he is moma's boy

i hate vic,noah,clara,arianna damn them

nice love making scene dia,plz soon do it and bring acourageous adrian who doesnt get affected by nicj,thats when they'll get even

thanks,we love you

Love the story writing. Please keep going and ignore the bad comment. Apparently that person had read more chapters than one? And that makes you think.

You always write about the same. Rich guy marries underdog. Underdog gets framed and rich guy takes evil ex back. Underdog leaves and makes something out of himself proves his innocence and they live happily ever after. It not original anymore and so unrealistic.

Talk about bad comments, making them under the "ANONYMOUS" means you can rant all you like and you are so a big and brave because no one will ever know it was you! If you are doing it, get some balls and put your name to it!!!

The writing and the imagination used to develop the story is excellent.

It is obviously not America and yet it never connects it to a modern country, which means he has created a whole civilization and way of life, traditions, beliefs ... That take quite a lot of doing and yes I know the writer hints, but never mentions what country it is.

Yes the plots are similar and I have read many other writers on more than this site and quite often a common theme runs through their stories. Look at novels in Amazon and prolific writers and you will find exactly the same... Working with a editor could help in this area as well.

I don't know for sure, but I would guess that English is not the writers first language. If that's the case then he is doing exceptionally well. The mistakes that many of you point out are caused because of language differnces and a simple edit would resolve them. VANALAS let an editor read through the text before uploading it.

Well done Vanalas and please keep writing, never let anyone discourage you. J K Rowling with Harry Potter and many other brilliant writers had their work rejected before finally being given a break .

yes i do,in addition to that

none of us can write without making mistakes and remember this is along story people lets not biggen the mistake thing

oh someone talked of stories being similar,hahahaha then this questions are for you:has the story ended?? if it hasnt then dont judge

in this one marriage come first isnt it?? if you remember well in previous ones marriage came last

first think before you act members,you people weaken our writer,i hope you see through it

well as aperson i think those badcomments come due to the fact that nick has annoyed all of us,yes am mad at nick too and yeah also as other stories,thr is ups and downs so this is it,its now the ups part so vanalas dont blame bad comments its that people are mad,though some of them exceed their limits

am looking forward to seeing adrian also dominating,,i beg he makes nick feel the way he is,and it all bases on your plans

Oh thanks 4 the love making scene mwaaa------by josranvictor

love you

Love the story, but would feel better if Nick grew a couple, and Adrian got tougher....like the story line ok as one has to be kept in suspense how things are going

Your story has an interesting premise. Your characters are a bit simple. I am having a hard time believing how they relate to each other. I believe Adrian is meant to be naive and not a worldly person. He is full of love, it how long will he let himself be abused before he has had enough? And Nicholas will get married and still put his mother first? They have some strange customs in this unnamed country. Sadly, I am curious enough to want to see how you finish this. The story has potential, but needs some serious editing.

those who have commented positively.....With you we can make our writer the best thanks for moral boasting him

I agree with all that Kelvin and the anonymous after him.

I also agree that you need to edit your stories, but I am enjoying this one. I have not read your other ones yet, but definitely will do.

Don’t let the negativity get you down, just keep writing and all will be well in the end.