All Comments on 'Starlets to Sluts: Jessica Alba'
by Sean Renaud
- 36 Comments
Anonymousover 18 years agoGreat premise, but there are some grammar and spelling problems that prevent this story from being that smooth. Also, I like nc to consensual, but the shift was kind of sudden. All and all, it was good. Keep it up!
Anonymousover 18 years agoLoved it, just wish you would add a lot more description about how Jess's body looked to the other guy, her lovely ass, tits, etc.
Anonymousover 18 years agoI'm a big fan of celeb stories, and we don't seem to get enough... I would love to see this turn into a series. Some suggestions for the next girl... Jennifer Love Hewitt, the Olsen twins, Christina Aguilera, Britney Spears, Jennifer Aniston, Gabrielle Union, Alyssa Milano, Angelina Jolie... the list could go on and on... Keep it up!
Anonymousover 18 years agoI liked RCF too, but you need to follow it more closely and take things a bit more slowly. Decent though (and everyone likes Jessica Alba)
Anonymousover 18 years agoI think the concept would work best if you focused on chicks who are legit starlets. If the concept is that they can get taken advantage of, it seems unlikely to me that someone like (as another commenter mentioned) Angelina Jolie would get tricked into this. Maybe think about all those hot chicks on WB shows or something like that.
Anonymousover 18 years agoI'd love a story with Jessica and Ashley Simpson! That'd make me cum harder than when I read this story.
Anonymousover 18 years agoYour story really made me hard. Although i would rather prefer, that the starlet wouldnt give in at the end, and the guys keep on abusing her against her will!! As i am a big fan of the great old Max Hardcore i really loved the settings and especially theaction done to Jessica. Keep on writing, ill wait in anticipation for your next story....maybe including some "older" victims, like Teri Hatcher or Pamela Anderson
Anonymousover 18 years agohilary duff, hilary duff, hilary duff for the next one please.
i cant believe more ppl havent wrote more stories abt her.
cheers
Anonymousover 18 years agoyou do some terrific stuff; glad somebody picked up RCF. Scarlett Johansson would be awesome for a sophomore effort
Anonymousabout 18 years agoReccommend, Eliza Dushku, Ashley Simpson, Vida Guerra, Shannon Elizabeth and Lacey Chabert. i think they have grat humiliation potential...
Slappy101almost 18 years agoIt was pretty good. The beginning was better written, as was the end. The middle got a bit jumpy and awkward. One problem you defeinitely had was deciding on first or third person. You kept sqitching from tehm to us, Jermaine to me, he to I. You can't do that. It's no good, just confusing. I thought there were three men for a while. Also, try to refrain from some of the more childish language, such as "... that's gross!" and "... my bootie!" This adult woman is being raped and then becomes a sex craving slut. She's going to use more vulgar words such as, "... that's fucking sick!" or "... my ass!"
Anyway, it was pretty good. Could use a bit of work, but its a good premise. Some future starlets I'd prefer are Ciara and Rihanna. I'm huge fans of them and have a series going about Ciara right now. If you'd like to look at it and give me some feedback its titled "Ciara Ch. 01 and Ciara Ch. 02"
Keep working and perfecting your ability and soon you'll be one of the greats.
Anonymousover 17 years agoGREAT STORY BUT YOU NEED TO PUT VIDA GUERRA, #1 SELLING PLAYBOY OF ALL TIME. SHE NEEDS A STORY. THAT ASSSSS
wheterbyover 17 years agoi would say Eva Longoria or Jessica Simpson next, both have preppy, "I'm a super-star, sex goddes that you can't have" type qualities to them. Especially Jessica because she doesn't seem too smart either. oh yeah and you have a few typos that need correcting through-out this story.
Anonymousabout 17 years agohow bout Michelle Rodriguez from Girlfight and The Fast And The Furious
Anonymousalmost 17 years agoi think that eva mendez would be perfect for your next installment
Anonymousover 16 years agoAmazing work man, I wish I could write like that. If it were up to me I would have you write next about Kirstin Keurk, Jessica Simpson, Nicole from Pussy Cat Dolls (or perhaps all the Dolls?), and perhaps the Olson Twins.
Anonymousabout 16 years agoDo Hilary Duff please but don't copy and paste the towel part... anymore, c'mon!
Anonymousover 13 years agook 4 starters great job dude
And 1 big big big vote for an emily+ zooe desanchel 3some
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Anonymousalmost 9 years agoReally entertaining story and just the right way to treat a tease like Jessica Alba! Since it has been almost ten years now how about a second chapter where Jessica failed to get another starlet to do a video and to get more time she has to make another video (gangbang)?!
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