All Comments on 'Starting Over Ch. 02'

This story is already hot n sexy, I am hoping it goes where I think it might. Could there be more babies in this family soon?

Getting better (I think). It seems like you are getting into the characters more in chapter 2. That would be a good thing. I have been reading stories here for a while and found I like the stories better with interesting characters. I also score them higher. You still have some errors with the wrong words, but the flow is a little better. That's my 2 cents. Looking forward to see what mom has in store. Make it interesting please. Thanks for your time and imagination.

Very good stories. Especially given they are your first and second..Looking forward too reading more of your stories.

Good story, but the spelling mistakes and grammar are a distraction.

I would have given it a 5 except for the ending. not good!

Need a proof reader. Flours used instead of flowers, mg instead of my

But that didnt ruin a beautiful story

That is one of many mistakes which didn't help your writing. Much of the dialogue is unreal, lacks credibility and as for the ending, come on, get real, that's ridiculous.

When you held your clock inside your sister as you came, that was all for me.

If you don't care enough about your writing to read through it after you vomit it out and before you hit the publish button, then how can you expect us to care enough about it to read more?

As others have stated, good story, horrible grammar and spelling is VERY distracting. Would have rated it higher without those distractions. Get an editor!

At least 40 writing errors. Get an editor.

I very much enjoyed both parts and eagerly await the next one.

Should have left Mom out of it. Had them move away together living as husband and wife. Maybe mom comes for a visit later

I loved the flow and pace of the story. Beautiful tenderness and I can’t wait to read more from this story line. Some of the other comments are too harsh with the words they use but the sentiment is true that you should read it through thoroughly or ask someone to do it for you. Overall, a beautiful story that could build and build. I can’t wait to read more.

For example:<P>

sisters -- plural<P>

sister's -- possessive<P>

sisters' -- plural possessive

you are not a native speaker, if even a non-native speaker can find so many misspellings.

I'm enjoying the story, but your grammar is atrocious. Seriously consider getting an editor. Or at the very least someone with better spelling skills to proofread what you've written. The stories could garner 5 stars if you could clean it up. Looking forward to reading(and not having to interpret)more.

isn't it amazing how people who cannot write publishable stories think it is their job to criticize those that do? and do it anonymously?. keep writing i look forward to the next installment.

Looking forward to mum joining them

The Mom should join them and three of them live sexy life.....Hope they get pregnant too.....

It is a great story! Please continue, I am looking forward to more.

AN EDITOR WOULD MAKE FOR MUCH BETTER SCORES...GOOD STORY, BUT I COULD ONLY GIVE YOU 4 STARS.

Held my attention all the way through. Very good plot. I am really interested reading at least two parts that include the son and the mother together. Love that mom!!

Maybe Jack will grow up a little with mom living with them. I like the idea of some mom and daughter action.

Reading these linked stories a second time, several years later, makes them all the better!