All Comments on 'Step-Father Knows Best Ch. 01'

It would be helpful if you would brush up on some of the grammar issues in the story. The difference between to and too for one. Makes for much better readability.

It isn't a perfect story, to be sure. But the dialogue is good, the characters fleshed out and the sex scenes not bad at all. Please keep writing.

I like how you take your time with both introducing the story itself and the characters, and the sex scene. Even with the latter depicted as superb, it seemed realistic. The criticisms as to your grammatical oversights are on point and you should take those positively: proofread the next chapter more carefully. There are far too many instances where subjects and verbs do not agree. (Take it from me, please: I'm an English teacher in r/l!) But you've got the start of a very good story.

Thanks for the helpful comments. I will work on those issues that were pointed out and try to be more thorough with my proof reading and editing.

Waiting for Ch. 2 - Dad & Jen - yummmm

But you need a little work on your grammer (use of tenses/choice of to, too & two). So speaketh me who has never written anything since college. You have an entertaining and intrigueing premise going. There are many options to develope. I wish you the best. Thank you,

That was a good first story . I liked it ,it has a real life feel to it .Please continue can't wait for the next chapter.

You have started a story that must be finished with several chapters. For a first story writer you have done a great job, please continue. Enjoyed every paragraph.Thanks.

I am looking forward to the three of them together! I didn't notice the "to, two, too" issue but "teas" is spelled "tease." Can't wait to read about Jen getting the 9 inches.

I'm looking forward to the next chapter. It could be Jen's first oral experience.

Please get one. Your grammar sucks! And this was not an incest story. It was Erotic Couplings. The next one should be.

Kept my interest...now the teaser for what happens next when Jen tries finding out...good one...you got me hooked for the next chapter!

It was alright. But I found this in incest/taboo and there was none of that. That is all, needed taboo sex, 3/5

Hurry up with Chapter 2 - I see it developing into a threesome :)

Very well written. I'm on edge for the next installment!

maybe she buys a vibrator while shopping and masturbates while listening to mom and step-dad fuck. or sneaks a peak. this could go many different directions but i can't wait for chapter 2

I really liked the story lines but there were a lot of typos and misspelled words and in some cases the words were wrong, like she instead of her. Needs to be proofed a little better. Can't wait to see what happens.

Am interested to read about mom and daughter getting it on with eachother

Please continue!!!! this is fantastic

why did you stop!!!!!!?

Wow, story just begs to be continued!

This is in desperate need of proofreading, I would really suggest getting someone to help out with all your stories, there are just too many sloppy mistakes, enough to lower it a score from what it might otherwise deserve.

Just the errors that stuck out the most, there are probably more:

defiantly - definitely

grim - grin

thru - through (thru is an informal spelling that should be avoided in prose)

other had - other hand

to big - too big

was a simpler - was simpler

He was always started - He always started

what pleases her - what pleased her

with out - without

last nights - last night's

use to - used to

teas - tease

pervious - previous

(and if sex could only be that way, then hot damn!), but at this point, it's just a nosie step-daughter.... please continue!

Back stuff coming down the pike.

Loving family oriented story finding themselves again - until the threat and probable intention of children incest- whether daughters or sons!!!! But then, I could never handle any kind of affairs - whether wives or husbands. Kick there ass out after preparing revenge.