All Comments on 'Step-Mother has a Secret'

The shift from past tense to present tense is killing me.

Not good. Are all makes such bitches

Good idea... but your poor grammar lets it down.

You have a good storyline. It covered several categories. A variety of characters and the makings of a sequel. Unfortunately it is really badly written.

It’s the first of your stories that I’ve read and with all the stories you’ve had published I expected something better. Something much better. There is a large chunk, a very large chunk, from the beginning that is repeated at the bottom of the first page/top of the second page. You wander from first person to third person. This story can’t possibly have been proof read.

It doesn’t leave any desire to read any more of your stories.

I hope that there will be more to this story.

I just loved this story, with there a couple more chapters. I could see this turning in to a big fucking orgy..

I love what richard goes through

I had to stop but will coe back to finish it

The story repeats itself in several places. Also, the time lines seem to get occasionally mixed up. As such, it is difficult to follow. You need to proof read before submitting for publication.