All Comments on 'Steve Fucks Dana's Brains Out'

Where to start? It's terribly terrible.

I like the premise. The detail is what makes a story really go and this was too rushed, IMHO. It needed to be moved along more slowly.

Pants off anal in the school hallway. Give me a break

do your mum and dad know you are writing under the bed covers when you should be asleep?

Please, please don't write like this again. Work some more on your writing, get an editor, or at the very least SOMEONE else to read it before you post it. The premise is .... well it's not original by any means but if you work on it, work out the kinks, learn to write better and just improve it will get there.

But please, don't post stuff like this again. This hurts everyone.

Just. No.

This is like--what?--Ummmmmmmmm? Jane Austen? Compared to most of the stuff here.

So shut the fuck up.

Big TOUGH Rabbit

Here's the prompt--

you're in control--

do what you want--

or what you can manage--

do something--

not doing anything counts, too--

(don't you feel happy--we do!)