by Christian Black
Quigley twins? catchy title! i didnt read the story but your title is sooo funny!!! I cant stop smiling!!
I enjoyed the story concept a lot. It's a great discussion of the social ostracism of the unacceptably unique like the malformed or the demented compared to the general societal embrace of the handsome or the genius at the other end of the abnormality spectrum.
It was greatly written, though the last bit on the first page was confusing. I loved it.
You have a terrific imagination and a true understanding of portraying a scene with words. Such a poignant ending that I cannot imagine any other.
Reminds me of several stories from Neil Gaiman's SANDMAN. Strange, daring, unpredictable, revolting where it should be sexy, yet strangely fulfilling. The sex scenes in this story were far from erotic, but I don't feel at all cheated. I think that if you pick this tale up again, you should see about reworking the dialogue. Muted, half-hearted dialogue crippled what might have been the two most mind-blowing scenes in this thing: the stage show with the sick girl and the scene in the psychiatrist's office.
You have a frightening imagination; I hope to see it on display in a more professional arena sometime soon.