by MattblackUK
I enjoyed the strange cur in the driveway play on the strange car trope. Well done! 5 stars.
Really nice piece of comic writing.
Sweet story...
It made me laugh, and that is a wonderful thing...
5 stars
Cagivagurl
I always enjoy your writing and thank you for another fun story. I loved Patrick. A very well trained dog and when Sue gave the command, ‘Seek him out’ it was beautiful. What happened to the migraine?
If you've had a genuine migraine, you know you wouldn't be able to do what he did
Wh00sher as a migraine sufferer, yeah, you could. Rage burns off a migraine.
What happened to his migraine? Only time I ever instantly "lost" a migraine was when someone did something really shitty and I blew my stack at them. Migraine? What migraine? It had vanished.
At least we knew from the title it was a btb story. Most of these stories we can't tell.
Fools that think with their dick forgetting about the consequences! A tremendous story with a happy ending for the betrayed “new family”
Loved this. No messing about, all sorted and as always, excellent writing. Thank you.
When I first read the title I simply thought you had made a spelling error. Then I realized the play going on. Smart dogs those spaniels!
If migraines made him almost go blinded he certainly saw the dog and the two assholes. Its too bad the dog didn't bite the wiener or the bun.
I had to laugh.
I'm no grammar nazi. If an author posts here with a copious amount of mistakes, I don't give a crap. I may provide constructive criticism, but at the end of the day, it's obvious that people have sometimes decided to stretch their creative juices and skillset by giving writing a go.
Kudos to you all, I say.
Why am I laughing though?
Because when I came across the word 'marital' (used correctly in this story), my mind automatically replaced it with 'martial', because I've seen it used in place of marital too many times here.
It reminds me of that scene from 'Happy Gilmore', where he gives a presentation at the school. The principle(?) replies that having heard the speech, he has lost IQ points, and "may God have mercy on our souls".
Maybe I read too much loving wives?
Naaah.
Canine shite seeking missile 🤣🤣
Deserves a 5* for that line alone, thanks for brightening a previously dreary Friday afternoon
Well written with some humor thrown in with the drama. And I just plain like it, a lot. *****
Adding dogs and puns doesn’t magically make this anything other than a tired, hackneyed yawn fest. Sorry man.
Clichés gotten out of the way early, STI’s brought up, and guy gets to do the other guys wife. Read this before. Pointless.
Yeah, I went all "grammar police" when I saw the title. Nicely played sir. The protestations of love by Felicity while oozing Roger's semen from her used cunt were not matched by her written actions at any point during the story. Quickly, conveniently moving in with Sue was just lazy writing.
Catching your wife cheating seems an extreme method of stopping a migraine, but it apparently worked.
Husband: "At one point I'd have forgiven her, gone into counseling and tried to make a go of it."
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That's no good, but since this is a rare (in this LW category, overflowing with cuck tales) BTB, Bring The Balance tale, even though in just 1 simple page, it deserves the full prize: 5* !
Lack of any interaction between MC and Felicity detracted. Moving right in with Sue detracted. Lack of any hint for what went wrong with Felicity detracted. Patrick added.
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3 ***
I loved the pun!
Initially, when I ran my eyes over the newly published titles list, my brain text-editor screwed up and I read it as 'strange car in the driveway' and I had hte usual 'oh, another one' reaction, then I sw it was you who published it, looked again, and the pun caught me and pulled me is. Well done!
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Thank you for the fun story!
The dog was great! 'Patrick O'Shaughnessy' made me laugh out loud! Love the spaniels!
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Be well!
Would have liked to see even a little bit of remorse or regret from the other wife. Seems like she got off WAY too easy!
I see that "cur" is a pun for "car".
The our hero waiting on the porch is a purebred, and that doen't match with cur.
A cur (where I live) is the result of unintentionally breeding a pedigreed dog, often giving pups of gross description. Think a toy poodle crossed with a huskey sled dog.
Still, the story is s good one snd easily fixed.
Hey! I would invest in a water powered pogo stick. It seems to be better than the F35.
Just to let you know, I did google Irish Water Spaniel nd they are an interesting breed. The curley fir was totally unexpected but I bet it feel amazing when you are trying to comb out the knots,
So did they all live reasonably happy ever after? I usually detest sappy happy endings, but this wasn’t too bad. Forgot about the obligatory revenge sex. Come on now, it’s the law, catch your spouse cheating, you have to fuck the other cheated on spouse. I liked it, especially having the dog flush out the cheaters
The dog and the therapist together were worth 5***** right there! The rest was just gravy.
"I learned that whilst Felicity loved me and that Roger loved Sue..." - The affair's been going on for several months, yet they still make convenient pillow talk?
The dog was an interesting story element. The rest was boilerplate, not least of which was the inclusion of a "therapist", the modern day version of the witch doctor.
Great story. The title was cute, I missed it a couple of times as my eyes see car. Situation very well handled by both betrayed spouses. I don’t think you could characterize Patrick as a cur though. He seemed like a pretty good boy.
I love this line: She must have broken the driving laws, and perhaps even the laws of physics,
First look at the title, I thought it was a mistake for car, but found out it wasn't. Don't know a thing about a "cur" type of dog, couldn't care less. It's interesting that his migraine was helped by catching his wife having sex with another man. Really, I wouldn't suggest that either. Still a nice story, if a bit short & somewhat rushed. 4 stars Bob
If catching your partner cheating relieves a migraine, does cheating on your partner work even better?
67 stories from the Welshman; the number I retired on.
Depending on the input from the woman, it could be fuckers, or one of each. I don't think fuckees would work unless there was another participant.
I look forward to number 68.
This was not your best but a definite 5 stars for the title.
Signed: a lad from Somerset. We have a similar flag!
Nice short story, guess his migraine cleared up fast? Enjoyed the dog aspect of the story. Thanks for writting.
Another cut and dried story today, pretty straight forward and bit bland. 4 stars
This is Good Writing: >>He was a thoroughbred Irish Water Spaniel who bore the splendidly Irish name of Patrick O'Shaughnessy. (Just take a few moments to Google Irish Water Spaniel. I'll wait.)<< The you handled this is perfect. Too many writers on this site (me included, though I'm in recovery) would've launched into a half-page history of the Irish Water Spaniel, the spaniel breed, why "water" is in the name, the history of Ireland, why Vikings founded Dublin, the potato famine... anyone who reads these pages will understand. They (We) do the same thing with guns, cars, alcohol, and military matters. You, instead, trusted the reader to see a "spaniel" or what we perceive to be a spaniel in our imagination and populate the story with that sweet old cur. The greatest bane of this site is overwriting. As stated, I, through my alter-ego, am in recovery.
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Even more brilliant is the use of 'cur' instead of car. Sadly, there are those who will miss the whooooole thing.
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I would only suggest avoiding the active voice, which is less direct, less forceful, and harder to read. Essentially, go through and remove all the direct "was" references from your story, replacing them with active transitive verbs. Sic your editors on that, and your writing will benefit. I loved the cheeky feel to it and the way you infused it with understated subtlety in that beautifully British narrative style. "Wizzo!" the old blokes would declare. Five stars on steroids.
What about them getting married and having another kid? And him being a good father to his stepsons.
Well... It sounds as though this little episode cured Carl's migrane... he should be wholly grateful.
The story written by MattBlackUK is exceptional; however, one wonders about the advice offered by a couple of comment writers. The_John_Yossarian from 23 days ago wrote, "The you handled this is perfect." So much about this sentence is flawed, one hardly knows where to begin.
A second statement from the same comment writer is, "I [meaning The_John_Yossarian] would only suggest avoiding the active voice, which is less direct, less forceful, and harder to read." I suggest the comment writer understands neither the difference between the Active Voice and the Passive Voice nor how each is used.
Oh that's a good one.
Written well, the plot although common, was worked that bit different
It was ok, better than a lot, at least they didn't have pizza for tea.seemingly the American go to food, in LW.stories
...where a bit player is the star of the show. Good doggie, nice doggie.
Thanks, Matt.
Keep 'em comin'!
So why did Carl need a therapist? Try to keep some reality in the story, especially with such a common plot.
Anon, Carl needed a therapist because he felt he needed a therapist to help him deal with the betrayal of his wife.
Fun, amusing variant of the "strange car in the driveway" trope. Doesn't get better than this. Cheaters kicked to the curb and cheated spouses move on; kids are better off and even the therapist understands the situation perfectly.
Thanks!
The reason why so many people need “therapy” is because our “civilized society” doesn’t allow the natural, correct response to provocation.
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Your boss yells at you in front of your team. The proper response to this is to beat him until he respects you. The law doesn’t allow that.
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Your neighborhood has a porch pirate problem. The correct response is to setup packages that will explode upon opening. A face full of carpet tacks means no more thefts. But, again, civilization says no.
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A wife betrays her husband. If she was stoned publicly, as per the ancient wisdom, it would warn others to be faithful. Modern women, and their politician lovers, have forbidden this, because they don’t want it to happen to them!
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Modern man is a ball of suppressed rage, because his sense of justice, honor, and respect is constantly being stifled. Western society has been completely feminized, leading to no one being punished when they disrespect, mistreat, or abuse others!
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ZK