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All Comments on 'Striking the Heart of the Wolf Pt. 01'

by Taysamor

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WolfenherzWolfenherzover 1 year ago

I will be looking forward to more of this story, great work so far.

davevsr1davevsr1over 1 year ago

Way too short for a 1st chapter as far as plot and background.

LiterKnightLiterKnightover 1 year ago

Good start to a story. Probably the most common feedback I give on this site: look into getting an editor. One of the bigger things I noticed was talking via a 'telekinetic' connection; telekinesis is moving things with your mind, telepathy or a telepathic link is communicating via the mind.

SensitiveHandsSensitiveHandsover 1 year ago

Great start! I will be on the lookout for the next chapter.

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Just your everyday naughty house wife who decided to pick up her old love of writing. Kinky in the bedroom and mind. Never wrote too many fictional works before, but I have a vivid imagination, love reading science fiction, romance, erotica, especially if i can find a great a...