by Byk_rydr
I love these kind of short reads..especially when well written as this was. Hot, Sexy fun, that was right to the point without feeling rushed!! Keep up the good work !
In theory, it was a great idea and well executed but I would recommend you get an editor as spelling mistakes can be off-putting.
Oh my was that hot , I am glad that you are writing a *5* from me on this one!
The best I've read in a while, spelling and grammar aside. Wish I had this type of experience when I was at that age.
Damn when she had him eat her out after he came in her just ruined it for me. 2/5