All Comments on 'Summer Fun'

4 Stars. I think you rushed it too much, could have spread it out with more details.

How many thousand times has this storyline been written? You would think new writers could try and come up with something somewhat original and not copy what others before have done.

Has potential but could have been so much better keep trying and use your thoughts and pass experience to tell a full story.

A few ideas here: Give the handyman a name, as it makes the story much more personal. It seems the two women already know him. Secondly, as it is such a hot day, have him strip his shirt off -- or they can take it off for him -- to reveal what is hopefully a bit of sexy hair spread across the man's well-muscled chest. Another sexy sight. A sexy romp for all three of them could be his reward for fixing the pump!