All Comments on 'Summer of '71: Heat Wave'

Very descriptively written. Relaxed, yet highly charged. Languid, yet full of passion. It's almost a shame it had to be an incest story really!

i never fucked my mom but i can relate to the first part of the story. as a nam vet i felt the same way when i got home.

Very well written. More graphic sex next time though! A-

Loved this story - hope there is some more coming - a gentle and very erotic performance by the son and the acceptance by the mother - you can tell that they have done this before and will continue doing it for a long time - even tho he is now home for good - Great writing - Keep it up

Boringggggggggggg. What a long nothing.

Do you actually call that a 'story'? After getting halfway through it and having arrived nowhere, I stopped reading and gave it the lowest rating possible... the first time I've ever done that. What pisses me off is that it could have been a really great story if you hadn't dragged it on and on and on and on until it didn't matter anymore. In real life, what you wrote would NEVER have happened like that. Maybe later on.... but not first thing.... not after they'd been separated for so long.

Your submission would serve as a "great script" for a porno. You just missed the who part about including a "story." I get your point about saving for the last paragraph the nature of the relationship, but you could have found some way to weave into the writing something that tells the reader that there is something more than "just sex" between the two. I hope this helps. I have read several of your writings and you have a talent for describing sex explicitly and in a fashion where the reader can visualize what you are describing, but that is all for naught if you do not learn that there needs to be a story surrounding and justifying the description of the sex. Otherwise, you just have a porno script. I hope this helps. --- 24641

Whenever a boy sticks his hard young cock up his own mother's warm wet cunt and unloads his hot young balls flooding his mother's insides with his creamy semen--the angels sing.

What else was there? Of the three pages, only two paragraphs told us anything about the characters. In fact, it was not till the very last sentence that the female was identified, and then only by her relationship to the male. Other than that, nothing else was shared with the reader. The story was missing in action.

just 2 long winded. 2long 2 arive at the climax

Very well written. Exceptionally graphic. Incredible story. And I LOVED the ending where uyou clarified that it was his mom. Keep up the good work.

Kills the excitement of taboo because you have no idea who this person is for the whole story. Also the sex seemed dispassionate

Very well written "mystery" incest/taboo story. Very detailed also.

Would like to know more about their relationship. Were they sexually active before he left? What happens now that he's back? Did he make or does he make his own siblings?