All Comments on 'Sun, Sea and Succubus'

I've read many a story on this site, but this is probably one of the upper-tier stories.

I came an upwards of 6 times just reading this. Please keep up the good work.

-R.

its a cool story but why didnt morrigan kill him?i read the whole thing :/

i mean the beggining is amazing and then...he survives?

you are really good and i suggest you write one with morrigan but actually finish the guy of

6/10

Morrigan as in Morrigan of Darkstalkers? I certainly think so! :) Morrigan has so few good stories, I hope to see more if you have any more of such stories lying around. :)

I liked the succubus (Dark Stalkers) and danger theme quite a bit. First couple pages were enticing. Though after that it seemed to fall apart as way too many elements were tied together all at once (kinda like the Dark Stalkers story line, too much, too soon, too often). From loneliness to fear of death, passion, then love in a page. Then hot girlfriend show off, characters assaulted, S&M, and then a werewolf transformation. I like a few good twists, but they need to be more sparse and have more character development to make it into a top tier story. This was a good story, but in my humble opinion could really use more character, emotional, and plot development with less twists to become top tier. Thank you for the good read though, and keep at it, as I could see your writing really flourishing with a few edits from peers on the site! ~Hap

i'd say this is one of the top stories on lit, i really enjoyed it.

Thing you can improve: some parts were too much descriptive (like the part after the beach).

I didn't get why morri got knocked down by the guys while jon takes blows without really noting.

I did not read the 'dark stalker' series so i dont know about any comparison between them.

Well other than that i think this story deserves 9/10

This was pretty good I really like the story created with the darkstalkers characters. J. Talbain was one of my favorite characters in the game.

Loved it!

Too bad there wasn't a 6 to give you.

One of if not the best Succubus stories written!

I am so glad this showed up in the random section. This was spectacular!

Thank you!

M1

I would very much like to have a follow up to this story. I'm fairly sure many others would like one as well.

So what's the other effect of her blood that he doesn't need to worry about just now?

Awesome Darkstalkers fanfic. Great work man.

I'm pleased to announce that i've finally started writing the sequel of your amazing Morrigan story !! And the way i've envisioned it it's going to be AMAZING !! Stay tuned... Also if you can provide me with the link of the Literotica register form it'll be much appreciated !!

If you still read you messages you will write more ! One of the best Succubus tales I have ever read !

Jack

The sex in this story was amazingly written. However, I agree with a previous reviewer in that it has just a little too much to be perfect. Having two different scenes in which a bunch of jerks attempt to hit on Morrigan is repetitive. The second one in particular could be left out: the violent death turned me off and made it hard for me to enjoy the following sex scene. On a minor note, it's "Homo sapiens", not "homosapiens" - two words, with the first always capitalised.

Celebrities and fan fiction is its own category for a reason, loser.