by Vulpes_R_Gentleman
I've just started your tale. After discovering your friend's gift on the sailboat, you say you returned to the "bridge". Just how big is that boat anyway?
I'm beginning to doubt your sailing prowess. The Queen Mary has a bridge, small sailboats have cockpits.
There are lots of things this writer does not understand......Kind of like movie trailers.....all build up and NO Meat....
Will there be meat with all this appetizer?
A 5 Star beginning
Even fantasies must be based, at least a little, on reality.
Seems like the author does not know much about sailing or sailboats. Or the waters southeast of Brisbane. For all the geographers out there, there are NO islands between Brisbane and Lord Howe Island. Nothing but 600 miles of briny deep. So, a 600 mile open ocean trip in a trailerable sailboat is a mighty hazardous adventure for any sailor, even a very experienced one. No sailboat that fits on a trailer could EVER be called a ship and it is unlikely that such a sailboat would have a "canoe" or even any kind of tender. Have to give this one a 2 only because the story is relatively well constructed and edited. Sorry, Vulpes.
We need more or at least I do. Do you write anywhere else or just here? If just here could you write some more?
It was JUST getting to the good part. The cliffhanger wouldn't have been as bad if the wait for the next chapter wasn't several years.
MC has a way of contacting people, and instead of using it to help the people he rescued, he goes all Robinson Crusoe on this? Bit by a shark? No problem! Bunch of dead people? No problem! There is some promise, but it needs a lot of work.