by Sonia_de_Beaumanoir
Great story execept for the non-consent switcharoo at the end. That puts the story in another category. Other than that, one major misspelling: " peaked [sic] my curiousity" : The correct word is piqued, pronunced the same as peaked, but it has a distinctly different meaning, which you can look up if you care.
that was kinda rape .. and i really don't appreciate sex without consent..could have written differently.
You may have broken one another's hymen with a dildo, but you did not take one another's virginity.
When he didn't say anything I knew it was th other brother you got to put up part 2
There is nothing better than to know the ending half way through, and to be unable to stop reading. Great stucture and a GREAT READ!
Great story! I hope the next chapters are as good!
Very few spelling/grammatical errors, which helped the story flow and easy to read!
The only suggestion I had would be to change the introduction of Becky. It's too sudden and except for dating the one twin now (which I assume is important in the sequels), she doesn't have much to do with the story. There needed to be a better "segway" or transition to bring her into the story such as... "One day, my friend Becky and I..." or "Back in high school, I had a friend named Becky..."
Keep up the excellent writing!
Thank you for a great story. I really enjoyed it. It is rare to find a story written as well as this one on this site b/c most of them are full of errors and are distracting to read. I think that you are an awesome writer! Great story!
That was really a neat story and you got me off more than once ; thanks . Do you plan a threesome ?