All Comments on 'Suspicion Ch. 02: Alternate'

Will we find out how his plan works out?<br><br>

I also think you <u>should</u> have considered AIDS and had hubby tell her that Karl had to wear condoms -- a little wedge that psychologically put him in second place and on the defensive.

There have been many chapters tacked on to this story. some very good, some in my opinion okay, some down right unbeleiveable. With this chapter however it is probably the most different way of either getting your wife back or getting rid of her. Actually I am surprised that in many loving wife stories the husbands hardly ever fight for their wife. They tend to just leave without a backward glance or they destroy them utterley. Since you have taken up the challenge of this story I urge you to carry on. In the story you talk about percentages. In the story Paul has had his wife's faithful loving for sixteen years. Karl has had it for eight weeks, and even then Kathy has never really been his exclusively. So I would say press home with the advantage. Keep the husband making love and sex with his wife. If it means getting assistants from drugs then so be it. To sum up, I say let the marriage continue. But of course Karl has to pay. He is the transgressor. he has to feel the pain of the husband. But in aslow painful and lingering way.

Anyway well written chapter. Hope to see you continue.

Anxious to see the end of the road.

While I hope that your protagonist's plan works out, I don't feel it necessary to find out. I wonder how many men would have the patience and understanding that this plan will require. Your gift for expression is profound and I hope to see more of your work

But to be realistic he should let her at least think he could be dateing also, to sit home alone with kids while she's out fucking Carl is something I could never do. Liked new take on story, thanks.

I was impressed by this chapter and was always dissatisfied with all the alternative endings to this story so I hope this one will do it. I must admit the original was realistic in that the protagonist never remarried nor really ever found happiness but I always hope for more of a happy ending for the ex husband. By the same token I don't need to see death and pestilence necessarily befall the wife; let the punishment fit the crime. We have lost many of the better cheating wives authors in the past few years so it is always great to see another talent submit.

Tow things. First, I agree that the plan should have also added some "free" time for the husband as well. Whether its real or not, twitting her about renewing ties with a girl that he had unresolved feelings for (an old high school or college girlfriend) might provide a shock to her system as she sees how it feels from theother side. If Kathy is shocked by the thought of his being with the secretary, maybe a discussion of "what's good for the goose is good for the gander" might make her rethinking the fairness of what she is proposing. But, from the authors comments, there are a number of chapters coming so this might be planned. <p>

The second point is one that was made in the original story. What about pregnancy? Is Kathy on birth control or taking precautions? As a shock tactic, the husband should have bluntly asked her whether she had thought about birth control and consequences if she got pregnant with Karl's child. This could be another method of getting her thinking about the nature of what she is proposing and how it is affecting her husband.<p>

<p>I seem to be in the minority, but I don't think its a good idea to give your wife ecstasy without her consent. There are many reasons this drug is banned worldwide (see Wikipedia). If she had a bad reaction then "The Plan" would be out the window. Are you going to keep slipping her E so that the sex is so great? If so, she will likely eventually find out and "The Plan" is toast.</p> <p>I'm enjoying the rest of your writing and looking forward to this different take. While I did not like the original chapter two, there have been several good alternative endings. I particularly liked fdkman262 take on Paul's role. It is always nice to have a well written, different take. Welcome to this site!

i like the story, but there is no ending. feels like an incomplete story. Ive read everyones ending to this story, i like this one the best. Im really suprised no one wrote a story with hubby going out and finding a girlfriend while wife is still at home, just to show her how it feels. i believe it would make her feel different bout her cheating. wish i could write this story, i have tried, but have found out im no writer. so congrats to all the writers here on literotica.

Thanks to all of you who are telling me that the story is incomplete. You may be abashed to note, that at the very beginning of the story, I explain that there are 9 (Nine, neuve, neuf, neun, and niner, to those of you who are flying,)parts and 15 chapters to this Novel/Novella. Actually the length is why I didn't put it in Loving Wives.

Best, Enjoy, and remember always, its fiction!

nice ending. but I somewhere read this story and it was either under an other writers name than Whiteone_Redone or at another place. I can clearly remeber because of that childhood story. I also can't rember if there were other writers to end it or not, but anyway why never anybody tried to find out more about that childhood guy. one of the endings I rember was that the guy was crazy and has disapeard because he was in a mental hospital for years... and now had become kind of a stalker of childhood friends and not really was fond of her he just wanted to destroy her life.

good setup....time for the final act!

since I can't have you, at least not now, so I agree to share you with Kark. <p>

I just don't want Karl to have too much of your time, as our children and I need you here more often, okay? <p>

Is that the attitude, the moral, of this story, of this man? <p>

LOL

Very well written and interesting. I look forward to seeing how you handle the wife's remorse and pain when she realizes what her behavior has done to her husband. I don't think she has a clue as to the depth of emotion her behavior has generated. A reconciliation story of the length you propose should let you explore the emotional impact at length. It is the emotion that makes these stories intresting.

Puzzling that when a writer tries to write to life that oftentimes it won't sell as its so goofy.<P>

Here we have a spouse who for several months is willing to play the part of a wimpish cuck. In real life a woman would have to be a real sick person to tolerate a man who was being a self cuckster - if he had no self respect how could she respect him?<P>

Yeah I know - its kinda like the STD's - its just fiction where anything is possible even though it makes no sense.<P>

So here we have an intelligent talented writer asking us to suspend any plausibility in his story about life and its travails. He must think we can be in two camps - one of life's rationality and another of silly absurd characters doing what no sane person would try to do.<P>

Constructively writer - I like your style, talent and innovative thinking especially when you ask us to suspend our normal life's reasoning and try to buy into your attempt at lifelike fiction which no rational person could play at with a straight face or not feel offended.<P>

To explain or accept - how could a rational man repeatedly have sex with his wife who is intentionally cucking him and their family - then eating her pussy on alternate days after her lover has filled and stretched it the day before?<P>

Even the eskimos had some sense on buying ice - or not.<P>

This is not to dissuade you but to ask you to use more plausible rationality in your next - which I look forward to.

With Regard

To a couple of readers who are upset about 'reality', 'plausibility' in story. May I remind you that I am continuing a story that someone else started, and who set some of the initial 'rules'. I am trying to ease the story in another direction, but I can't help it if the protagonist has been cuckolded — that's where the original story left him! LOL! So have fun with it. I think that later chapters will have enough twists, turns, and surprises to make it stand on its own. BTW, its wonderful to have the voting turned off, where one can feel guilt free to post notes, and not appear to be trying to effect the score.

"This is my ending, in which Paul is not quite so dogmatic about Kathy's situation..." After all, how could any man become "dogmatic" in the slightest about his wife screwing another guy on a regular basis? lol

The story - like "THE PLAN" (only the author didn't capitalize it in the story after describing that he did !?!?) is well-planned and methodical; Revenge 101.

I like the proposed set-up so far - let's see where things go.

Good re-start.

I did like the original story, yours is going to have to take a quantum leap over what it is now to improve it. By the way you fuck your wife not knowing she may be infected by another man is one thing. Knowingly fucking a slut who fucks someone else in this day and time is to be braindead. Her lover after all is fucking a married woman part time. Who else is fucking to fill the time and where?

The concept presented in this tale makes me wonder if you aren't a teacher in your 'day-job'? While I will admit to this having a 'revenge' element, the main thing that struck me was how hubby is letting his 'Loving Wife' make her own 'discoveries' one by one. While at the same time pointing her in direction he intends. Every good educator knows that you push students, but let them make their own ‘OMG’ finds. That way the new knowledge sticks to the cerebral cortex. --- Well done Sir.

and now shall read the rest of the chapters that you have published so far.

First off the marriage counselor has no clue about real motives. Her real motives are these: Having found that she is getting older, she need to affirm that she is still desirable. At the same time she needs to keep the bread winning husband from divorcing her. Enter the old boyfriend. She can prove to herself that she is still desirable and make it seem like it is only temporary. Second is a quote of what she really thinks:

"Oh, darling, I would never want to humiliate you like that! Of course, I understand. I want you to know, that when I've been with Karl, we've gone out of town if we were having dinner or a movie, or anything in public." A small, almost bitter smile came across Kathy's face, "Of course, I had been hoping you wouldn't find out, but I guess that isn't the issue anymore. But, I promise you, I will be discrete," she finished.

Her first statement is false. She indeed never even thought about the consequences of her actions. Then she explains the painstaking plan she had to keep the affair from him in the first place and how it would have then been a permanent affair as he would never know. that is why this story is a zero but I will give you 25 because you are working with the stupidity of someone else story.

Very creative. Obviously, Paul is in this for the long haul and to win. This actually could work if the husband could get past his wife’s previous transgressions. This might be possible given that it has been two months since he found out and he could think rationally rather than emotionally. I’m not sure I could. I would still be terribly hurt and my thinking wouldn’t be clear enough to develop such an elaborate plan, let alone implementing it. Very creative Nice writing style. It has a nice flow that makes it enjoyable to read.

your story is well written, and some can't understand a broken heart and what can drive a person to exact their pound of flesh. your tale is a tale of revenge. thank, bockscar!

From the start here I would say your ending is better then W_R ending.

thanks for the story

but halfway through I could see that you were not being real about this; you have your values, and you don't want a willing cuckold - you were just making him out to be crazy (as in 'insane', and not simply stupid and naive). He just wants to have sex, and he's not going to turn it away, even if it is cheating - he will end it himself. Once that's accepted, the story becomes easier to chew on >.< The main remaining problem is that you start off diverging at Chapter 2, rather than Chapter 1 where he had rejected her. You didn't explain properly how he changed his mind, though I guess it was the counsellor, but you didn't go into detail there..

What is with you writers? Somehow there is a mind set among you that a man must accept being a cuckold and let the "little woman" back into the fold. Well, in real life we would call such a man a "loser extraordinary".

Your tale has premise, although I can absolutely see no way how he can take her back in the end. She has now become the enemy. Even considering that he isn't really fighting 'for' her, but 'against' her, I find it highly unrealistic that he can switch off his feelings enough to sleep with her without constant vomiting. But ok, I except that as a fact for now.

but, Ineresting.....bill

but I don't find it possible, one slip with an ex. Then it my be possible to forgive that. But six months of fucking around, I just don't see it as a slip.

While you may want to ignore things like STD's and pregnancy it seems unrealistic to write something like this and assume the readers' will completely suspend reality. And even fiction has to have some basis in reality to be believable and this story isn't.

I have to agree with 'anonymous' above in so far as STD's etc, are concerned... I would have thought that as part of his taking control and separating their emotional bond was his prime objective, I feel that he would have insisted that they ALL be tested for STD's before she indulged in any further sexual activity (including oral) with either party and that both men used condoms. Once all being given clean bills of health he would insist she continued to use condoms with Karl, while he, of course (being her husband), would revert back to his condom free sex. Just a thought, but it's the way I probably would have gone as has the advantage of ???? giving him the advantage (of increased control) and also making her and Karl's sex less personal, therefore, further separating their emotional bond and physical closeness. After all, he could argue that although SHE trusted him not to cheat on her, it was obvious that he, the husband, could not?

Talking about STDs and insisting on tests and condoms would have been a way to remind her that her actions put her family at risk and to create tension between the lovers.

A cheater cunt is to be burned and destroyed. Nothing else. Once a wife is a wife, she isn't to be won again and again as she finds others to pit against you. No, you destroy her, everything associated with her and especially Karl.

COMPLETE. DESTRUCTION.

we are stuck with your premise. But, as you said this is a derivative story. You also have to use the basis from the previous author, which you are ignoring by instigating The Plan where you do. At your starting point Karl knows, hubby knows, cheating wife knows, the sister knows, even brother in law knows. And yet, he has declared he will not be a willing cuck and already kicked her out of the house. But to make The Plan work he has to invite her to move back in. He has to acknowledge to all of the knowing parties he is willing to have her come back to his bed and accept her duplicity. Sorry, but what does that make him?

Now, if you had moved the starting point a bit earlier, before she knew, he knew, you could devise and enact The Plan. Monopolize her time. Not allow her the opportunities to slip away after hours or weekends. Read up and study what you should have been doing for all the previous years together. and then take action against Karl without him knowing you are coming for him.

oh well, let's see where we are going.

not my favorite premise though, but you are working within the framework that you "inherited". Not sure that I would have done it this way, but hey as long as he gets to the part where he implements the payback, I am sure that he will be satisfied with what he had to do. I am glad that STDs are off the table, complicates the story and makes for awkward situations. This story is about implementing a plan and hard to do that when the "chatos" are itching you to death. Give 'em hell, Paul.

I personally like the "and Hell followed with him" kind of payback, but hey, everyone isn't biblical.

I quit reading when you introduced the a date rape drug. It's a cheap plot device and tells me you are of low character and moral status.

Shame on you. 😒

You do write to a high standard compared to many on this site, which greatly helps the enjoyment of the story.

The original was also well written but with an unsatisfactory and very sad ending with the injured party the one that is isolated and betrayed, with the sole responsibility of bringing up the children and no love in his life. His wife was a very selfish and foolish woman who did not seem to realise the hurt that she had caused to her husband and children. Her idea to share herself between husband and lover was unacceptable to the vast majority of married men. At worst she was utterly betraying her husband at best forcing an open marriage on him with him being an extremely unwilling cuckold.

In that sense she deserved to be burnt but two things go against that from my perspective:

1. The marriage needed healing for the sake of the children and the husband

2. She was foolish and cruel but only by her stupidity rather than by maliciousness. He stupidity was based on a schoolgirl crush, an unrequited love, as it were, rather than lust or the thrill of cheating.

So a reconciliation is acceptable to me even in these extreme, deal breaker circumstances. Hopefully this will happen to the satisfaction of all other than the old boyfriend and that she does suffer some but not the ultimate punishment.

Better to be miserable alone and stand for what is true and right, than to be living a lie.

His relationship with Kathy is damaged beyond repair. No matter what happens in the future Kathy can't unfuck Karl. And he will always have to live with the fact that he is a cuckold, his family will know that he is a pathetic wimp.

The sis in law and her husband already know. His children will someday find out. More people will as well. He has to live with that as well.

I see no scenario were things ends well for the protagonist unless he makes a clean break and finds someone new.

There are no such things as soulmates...

I havent read the rest of the parts yet, not sure if I even will. But the only way for him to be a winner is to destroy Kathy and Karl's relationship. Destroy Karl and his entire life( business, body etc) and they destroy Kathy in a divorce and also any future with any other mate she can possibly ever find.

She won't stop fucking the asshole and part of his plan is to take her back? FUCK NO! I agree with his original thought. Fuck over the asshole, get her fired for conflict, and dump her cheating ass. 1*.

You set yourself up to be the cuckold? You just validated the boyfriend's station as a recognized member of your marriage! You sat down with your wife and set up a schedule for his intimate access to her; you're officially recognizing, or at the very least, acknowledging her adulterous relationship along with giving your tacit approval! You actually assigned times for them to spend together. Good luck in divorce court now, cuckold.

You kicked the bitch out - why are you now bringing her back? Any woman this stupidly cruel is no one to spend the remainder of your life with. Holy cow. What a consummate, absolute weakling.

Doesn't seem like much of a victory, he has now helped schedule the cuckoldry.

Doing something like this long term mostly seems like masochism.

And if it's gone on for months, I would really have expected him to start hating her wanting to punish her just as much.

It would be fantastic if he really did throw her to the curb afterwards. ☺️

He is now a certified sissy faggot! The only way to save this crap is if he killed himself.

Why did't you state a warning a the beginning of this shit WARNING: Sissy faggot story ahead. What a waste of time. No need to read further. It doesn't matter how you try to spin it form her. This is another crap story meant to justify a heartless CUNT and her selfish actions while leaving the guy with no balls.

is the only one on here that should kill himself. he's fucking insane!

Never change a good story!!! The original story is good but that crap is only for perverts or brain sick ones!!!

Requirement Number One:

She agrees to being permanently sterilized.

No way should Paul allow himself to be put at any risk of being stuck with child support for one (or more) of Karl's bastards by some 'for the good of the child' family court judge.

No surgically removable implants.

No 'Oops, I forgot' pills, IUD, diaphragm etc.

I've read all parts of Suspicion and decided to enter my comments here at the end of the first installment to encourage other readers who may decide not to read further to press on -- it will be worth it. This story is probably the best of the genre. Five big gold stars for all 15 parts.

Hay Annon, you stated the writer was and I quote here, a certified sissy faggot.

Now I'm not going to pick points with all of it, he may indeed be a bit of a sissy and as Nasty discription as it is, he may be a faggot.

The point I take umbridge with is your claim he is "certified". Where did he get this certification? Was it a college course? Is this a nationally recognised certificate? What were the required segments needed to pass this course?

You are being a bit fast and loose with other people's academical history here which doesn't seem fair. Not unless you have some kind of inside knowledge in this particular certificate maybe?

And as for "killing himself" don't you think this is maybe a little excessive for what is an exercise in writing? As for the "no balls" claim, how would you know? Did you look? Is this a habit of yours? To look at men's crotches and try to guess if there is indeed a pair of love plums there? I think you protesteth too much my good sir.

To finish, I think something has struck your nerve a little to closely and you have my sincerest sympathy.

You have a nice day now!

That crap for only telling us your pervert fantasy about cuckold/wimp??!! Go to fetish or another section but dont pester "normal" readers!!!

It's good that you turned off voting, cuz, even though you are a fovorite author... this was WAY below your usual work.

Shoot the bitch in the face and do the same to her lover.

I find this story of vastly inferior quality than the real story from the author. I thin I'll pass on the rest of it.

Not bad so far, need to see how it works out. I would just help Karl disappear.

The original was good. She cheated in the worst possible way (pyshical and emotional affair) and he divorced her. You haven't explain why he wants to keep a cheating slut as his wife. No talks about STDs either. And what bout him? Can he get some sex from other sources too? So far a stupid and unneccesary sequel.

I understand why you took the voting. It would have been negative stars from me.

I have two quick points about the couple only being with Karl's friends.

Sometimes, a couple's friends resent the cheater and feel that they have a right to speak and act on their feelings. This can be unpleasant for a cheater. She would have to get her husband to pretend to be happy with the situation. And the children would have to be fooled for years so they wouldn't even accidently tell on her.

Every place she goes with Karl creates another place where she and her husband can't go. This isn't fair to the cuck.

Wandered off and fell asleep.

A thinking mans reaction/revenge in a story for a thinking man rather than a stroke story. Something new is usually good.

Chur m8 awsum story

This is the one that I've been looking for. The one where the bastard Karl gets destroyed. I hate that sumbitch.

And start hiding assets

No.

LWlurker

What's this stupid story about? A betrayed husband empties the garbage can that his wife was and into which someone else dumped his garbage? Don't you dread anything? I would never knowingly want to have sex with this whore again. But some men are so perverted that they don't even dread it. And why so much washing up? He can report the conflict of interest to his ex-wife's employer, sue her lover, and move forward with his life! Why does he need this slut?

Too stupid to be enjoyable ⭐️

What? This is too stupid to believe. Another delayed cuck. Standard lw fare. Stretched out over many chapters. No thanks.

Rereading this and honestly, given the outcome of the original where the wife ends up apparently having a happy second marriage with Karl and Paul ends up a lonely bitter man, this sequel is a much better way to handle things. He is trying to permanently destroy her relationship with Karl and destroy Karl's business and wife's job and business reputation. He can always dump her or not as he sees fit after he ruins asshole Karl and fucks over wife. Let's see if he succeeds.

The original story, though not very satisfying to most, probably would have been the more realistic outcome... this is some childish adolescent revenge fantasy that has no business to even be regarded as a viable ending. 1-⭐

Nah you're a cuck

Two delusional human beings.

Wife happy she can have her cake and eat it too. The stupid husband thought his "The Plan" made him retake control. NOT! The story just shows how big a cuckold he is.

Start enough. Another wimpy cuckold story

Please a separate category for this garbage

Damn! so far, so good. Can’t wait to read part 3!

Just kill her and be done with it!

I'm one and done. I can handle a btb story or a raac story. But what I can't take is a story about a wife who wants her cake and eat it too. If she's going to do that, then he has to either give her the boot or respond in kind such that she comes to understand the ramifications of her infidelity.

After the whore is fucking another; one and DONE!!!

The ‘PLAN’ left out when Paul takes lessons on how to eat Karl’s CUM out of Kathy’s pussy. R.H.

Post. You should choke on your words.Utter nonsense!! What world do you live in? NO MAN would invite a wayward wife back into his life with the option of her being with her lover once a week to get him out of her system. Suggestion: try,try and try realism in your tales or download your stories to the fairy tale category,even in that I am not sure it would qualify. I wasted my time looking for a good tale and getting something like this attempt...2 stars...

Very interesting. Can’t wait to see how this plays out. I’d give it a 5* for now.

Balanced and plausible so far.

Damn…why the hell would he even WANT to stay with this nut job?

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And his “Plan” is too complicated. Just spend a couple grand and have Karl’s legs busted and his nuts smashed.

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3 ***

What Anon Damn said.

Eh Mc is too wimpy and dumb for me. Maybe let her have her fun and he has his and stay married for the kids. This version is too wimpy for me to read 15 chapters of it

This is an interesting pivot. I take it that the author is using the fact that the original had MC never date or remarry as the basis for this. The deviousness could be either concerning or delightful as the series continues.

I'm reading this as a thought-experiment based on the premise that there is some value in maintaining the husband-wife relationship. Interesting for sure. In "real life" however, there would be no reason to continue. She already betrayed him, she already has separated herself from their union, he can no longer trust her, and she has no concern for his pain. If you really love someone, you don't purposefully cause them pain and torture. I'll continue reading under the thought-experiment umbrella.

I quite agree. Who would want to stay with a woman who betrayed her family?

So I am very torn. I really love your writing, but having a hard time understanding why he would want her back when she is so convinced that she gets everything she wants with no repercussions.

Can’t wait to read the next one.