by cpete
Thanks for writing that. The original story line needed an ending like yours, something with some justice for the cheaters and a more gentle way forward for the aggrieved. Only wish Kathy's character realized and accepted what she did... or swam in lava.
This was very creative, getting the son involved in this sequel.
I guess it’s been too long since I read the original, but it doesn’t make any sense to have the ex having access to the children and not paying ANY child support.
To the last Anonymous:
THESE are the most despicable characters in LW?
Wow, you must be new, here, lol! 🤪
Congratulations! You have written a story with the most despicable cast of characters ever to grace the LW genre. Other than Aunt Evelyn none should be allowed to ever leave their house. Just nasty self-serving scum suckers of small understanding and low intellect.
Holy crap, somebody put this woman out of our misery. Delusional doesn't even begin to describe her.
Never understood the not telling the truth to the children about why the divorce unless very young. Let the cheating spouse control the messaging may seem like the moral high road, bit is really dumb. As an aside, how was Karl able to get away with snatching Karl Jr and running away. Even as a German dual citizen, he would lose the kid on extradition. He not only left the state with his son (can you say "Amber alert") UT left the country. That is essentially kidnapping. Doesn't matter if he thinks she cheated. Maybe he lives life on the road and seeks to avoid the authorities but Karl obviously did not do that here. Might take longer because of cross Atlantic legal issues, but if Karhy pursues it, eventually Karl will lose all custody, have to pay child support, get fined and likely imprisoned. Doesn't matter how good a lawyer he has except to delay things to see if she gives up.
One of the better sequels to this story. Always great to see this bitch get burnt. Even more fun to see Karl get tuned up a little.
It always flumoxes me when the parents tell their children that they should not concern themselves with why and what-fors of the divorce because it only affects the parents... what a crock... it affects everyone in the family and if the children are old enough they should know why the divorce is happening so they will understand that it was not their fault so as not to feel unfounded guilt for it happening... the father, thinking he is being so noble and virtuous by not exposing the wife's adultry, is nothing but a bumbling fool leaving everyone else lingering in painful confusion.
This is a perfect illustration of why the cheated on dad should always tell EVERYONE why he’s divorced from the slut. Don’t hide the sins of traitors and let people think that you are the bad person. Children especially need to know the truth as soon as possible. If not, it leaves them with false perceptions. They will eventually find out, and that will mess them up even more. A small grief immediately is better than not being in harmony with objective reality!
ZK
never found Whiteone's original stories but this was pretty funny. In a sad way
Why average?
A certain amount of these stories always take the kids to task when they tell mom like it is.
Critical error!
As other stories have it Do you want your kids raised by an immoral etc spouse!?
Karl?! Two to tango.
Agree
So so only.
Defended cheating wife to kids. What a life lesson. Oh new society. Have to fit in and run with the herd.
Right when buried
🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣 Sir you absolutely had me in tears from your comment. Of course the obvious answer to your rhetorical question is because we are all hypocrites in one way or another. The rest of your comment is pure genius and I thank you for the mirth I derived from it.😁👍
🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣 absolutrly had me in tears from your comment. Of course the obvious answer to your rhetorical question is because we are all hypocrites in one way or another. The rest of your comment is pure genius and I thank you for the mirth I derived from it.😁👍
I don't remember reading this. It is a great take on the original, with the children breaking up Karl and Kathy. I enjoyed it again, and I still hate Kathy.
Forget about dumbass Harryin VA’s comments! The wife mother got exactly what she deserved. She was was a selfish bitch! She only thought about “what she needed”! She didn’t care about her first family when she gave them up! NOW she needs them, ha!
A much better ending, the irony is NOT lost on me.
Great conclusion.
Scores 5/5 easily
Suck a bitchy little girl you are. It is easy to find if you aren’t a dumb ass.
Good story. Previous ending sucked
I like this ending. But I like anything that sticks it to Kathy and Karl. Having the son doing it was a good touch.
IF YOU WANT US TO READ THE PREVIOUS VERSIONS THAT POST A BLODDY LINK TO IT! Spent more time finding the original that reading this!
Excellent, very good story. Loved that it was from the Son's point of view.
Original ending was better..........this was just silly,stupid and not very well written....CPETE usually writes better....just my opinion.....
thru - through (the informal spelling has no place in prose)
dads - dad's (a whole bunch of times)
Grandpas - Grandpa's
When is last time - When is the last time
families - family's
lets go - let's go
Your 18 - You're 18
straighten out - straightened out
overnight Mom's - overnight at Mom's
finically - financially
Christ's - Christi's
(probably a lot more missing apostrophes etc these were just the ones that popped out)
“I can't lose Karl again-or Karl Jr." – Too bad she wasn’t as worried about losing Paul or her first two children, then they wouldn’t be in this mess!
It was funny and satirically plausible at the same time.
Best off Paul isn't a living insurance policy in case his ex's first choice didn't work out.
I did the same shit to whore mother .Didnt use pics.I took 4pairs of her pantys and shot cum in them then hid them in 4places one under her front seat of car he found them first cleaning her car . One under her bed, couch pillow , one in dirty hamper in bathroom. Only bad thing dad didnt want her back .I didnt get it I was 13 now I understand why dad was that way.I know you think I was a bad son but she chose a DICK over her son a fucking dick ment more to her then me FUCK her.
Like the plot - kids with a touch brainy vengeance.
btw - I have 4th row center ice seats for a hockey game in hell next week. Any takers?
"Dad tried to give Christi and ME a tongue lashing the next day" ? This error appears throughout the piece.
Otherwise good.
has learned nothing, or accepted responsibility for anything.
he (and the kids) start to come back to the surface. but have a long way to go.
I agree with your intro assessment of Kathy's pristine lot in life and made that comment on whiteone_redone's page.
This was a cleverly crafted ending to the story. Kudos
That was a sweet touch where the daughter oh Karl won't share you now that he ismarried to you,but he would when you were married to Dad?
Priceless
It's so we can stop wasting our time, energy and emotions on them. The kids became "OK" around their mother, but never invested the same time or love they had before in her.
It's nice when kids actually understand who really cares for them.
that Kathy, in all her brain waves, went out and bought skates and a file, TK U MLJ LV NV
This was a bit predictable as regards to Jason. As soon as he opened his mouth, we all knew he was behind the whole thing. Still well written, as are all of cpete's stories, and thoroughly enjoyable too.
I have just one more question about Forgiveness. Why do we forgive all the small thing, which, by being small hardly require forgiveness, yet we still hold a grudge with the big stuff. Oh we say that we forgive the big stuff, but we still hold that grudge. "I may forgive you, but I won't fucking well eat at the same table as you!" Hypocrisy!
Now then, for true fans of sarcasm: Instead of debating my comment, and counterpointing it with logical argument and intelligent reason, as is the norm, I humbly request that all you Anonymous posters just bash my comment, ridicule my personal hygiene, question my intelligence and manhood, and make some brilliant observations about my sexual orientation! You know, just for a refreshing change!
But ruined it with the BS forgiveness crap. Fuck forgiveness! If I go out and Eat a live baby on national TV, and then look at my shoes and say sorry(blink blink), does that make it OK? Am I still forgiven if I keep doing it, and don't say sorry, like the bitch in this tale? "God" supposedly forgives all. Does that include the unrepentant? If yes, then why the fuck is Satan in Hell? If forgiveness is so great, then why do we put people in jail? Just ask for a murderer to apologise, forgive him, and let him go!
If all I own in this life is an empty sack, and someone`s forgiveness, I'll keep only the sack! At least an empty sack is worth SOMETHING! Forgiveness is ONLY good for making the forgiver feel good about themselves. Egotism? Pride? Selfish? Aren't these sins too?
Do the right thing by people, and forgiveness is unnecessary!
According to a well respected theologist most people misunderstand forgiveness.
First must stop harming.
Second must make a sincere apology.
(and the victim gets to decide whether to believe or not)
Third must make every effort possible to make amends.
Only if all these conditions are met is forgiveness required.
A patrol officer is no detective and if you know cops, he would not likely go to that much trouble for a piece of shit sister/ sister in law.
Your ending was certainly more satisfying. The original was pathetic. WR must really hate men. Sometimes I'm stunned by the misandry that infects this section of lit. But I guess we see it in advertising in tv and movies and especially family courts so I shouldn't be suprised to see it here.
I really liked this version, unlike the other follow ups which made me want to puke. 5 stars
I figured out early what happened so it was a bit of labor to finish. Always, the words chosen by an author to describe events make or break a good story and so...I gave you a five.
I can't blame dad for being a man and stubborn and Kathy was too weak with an old boyfriend and she paid a high price. i gave her credit because she apparently did love the guy but good old Karl was the cheaters' cheater, if he really cared for her he would have attempted to verify facts - in person but no! Don't think Kathy was a slut, just a weak woman in love and lust.
Thanks!
this could be a stand alone story or an alternate ending, TK U MLJ LV NV
How do you get even with a cheater?
Do nothing. Your son will do it for you.
HA
That is not the best way to tell this tale. Especially since it was kind of obvious from the beginning. But the revenge crowd needs to be fed.
Still the wife never did come down off Cloud 9.
You should fix all of Red1's stories, I'm sure she would appreciate it.
will never be beneficial to any one involved in this fiasco. TK U MLJ LV NV
Do you fetch and lick your balls ?? Maybe roll in shit?? I bet you do!
your like the rest of us, atleast I tried. But your one of those jack asses.
Not even up to the one-handed typing standard.
In real life evil may get rewarded like the slut wife, but we read fiction to get above real life for awhile; a brief escape where good is rewarded and evil is punished. 1 star for Ch. 2, 5 stars for this ending.
Having the kid engineer the revenge was a nice twist.
You are a complete shit head, this was a very fitting tale. Cpete hit it dead on, Thanks for an outstanding tale.
one of the worst stories I've read. Unoriginal, not entertaining, and can't spell. Finically? Really?
You did a superb job. Your having Jason primarily and Cristi secondary control the discussion after Kathy entered the family's front door was rather original and fir in very well. I really like you writing. Only negative are grammar and re-structuring of a few sentences. Edit your text after you formulate it: or have a friend edit your stories.
Karl was a creep....married women are off limits.....let them get divorced if they have to sleep around...good job
because bad guys should not win! Thanks for writing it!!!
SleeplessinMD
and wrote one chapter, but everyone attacked me for trying, so kept it to myself, but i liked yours too, mine was not so many years after that, and type of move one story, i like where man fights, even the weakest man will fight when forced to, don't know why people take some people so lightly. Great story, keep writing, 5 from me.
good effort, better output.
Liked the satire of this tale - and it fits well with "once a cheater, always a cheater". Now where is that idiot shoe-no-IQ to defend this skank?
Well done cpete. I liked this story a lot...that said, a couple of small peca dildos. Kathy was much smarter in the first story...here she is portrayed as pretty stupid with her myopic worry only about her second husband and child and/or her lack of a cogent defense with her children. After all she had a very responsible job with the Cable CO. Also, the time line is only explained in the prologue/introduction. One never got a specific sense of how old the two kids were...therefore it was tough to judge the maturity of both children. I reread the first story, but still...not nice to the reader. Nonetheless, a wonderfully clever story. Thank you cpete.
This was a great ending to a difficult story. A unique twist in that the son takes over the narrative, but I thought it was well put together. Great work.
cpete,
I liked RHinSC' comment too, as well as many others....
Great twist on the original best yet on Ch 3 of others. Really Great!
Thanks for sharing on Lit. very much!
x
I liked that the son wanted his mother to feel the pain she had caused.
Good read, The kid gets revenge. In some situations kids do have revenge fantasies just like adults. Needed more care in developing the story.
Thanks. Keep writing. You have the right stuff.
Nothing like getting it stuck in and broken off by the kids. The young man had seen his fathers constant struggle and it angered him. Thats realistic. I'll bet the uncle did get a chuckle out of it at some point. Don't they say that kids can be way more savage than adults? Good stuff.
Kids always get hurt in the divorce, and it was very clever to think about the teenage son getting revenge. Interesting read.
Well done, even though I didn't read the previous story, I followed the story just fine. A good stand alone story.
I thought that the son getting even with his cheating slut of a mother was great, and causing her pain like the pain she caused his father was the best.
Thanks for the good read.
Good option, most authors seem to neglect the anger and potential revenge of the kids... I liked this ending.
she got what she deserve and to be clear it wasn't enough punishment for the nut case wife.the first writer should've make it clear that the wife was a tramp and punish her.
It underlines that the biggest victim is the children. Even so it reminds us that all actions lead to reaction and that revenge only leads to more revenge unless you follow the scorched earth line. Note, that in this new solution Karl Jr. is a new victim. It never ends.
The story itself is not that believable, but the crappy spelling and punctuation certainly is.
Nice job! It's too bad that you did not have an epilogue where say after Karl jr, graduated from university, Karl Sr, receives a anonymous package with with photos and a explanation on how the everything was faked and set up. His reaction maybe? Just a thought.
already a very somber story in the first place and all you did was make it even a sadder one. now 3 kids have to carry the burden some adults should have.
did you get off on something like that? a very wierd imagination. tastes are for sure different I did not think of this peace in an erotic way.
I thought this was a much better story/ending than the other ending to the original story. This way the husband gets his self respect back. I still think someone should write a fourth chapter where the stupid ex-wife talks to a shrink about the state of her mental health. Even in this story she still doesn't understand what she has done. As I understand it even swingers and people with open marriages don't love anyone more than their husband or wife and any sex they have is just sex not love or so these people say. Well done writer and good attempt at pretty bad original story.
Very creative and rather unique way of dealing with this story. Please help your readers a bit more to make sure we know whose POV is speaking--especially when that changes during a confrontation.
My only negative is my doubt that the son could have pulled off the elaborate con. He may have watched "The Sting," but how did he get all the pieces to fit together? Perhaps if you had given him a partner, possibly someone who was cheated on as well, it would have been more believable.
Overall, though, a good read.
One of the frustrating things about some of these stories is that the kids are often left in the dark because the husband who has gotten crapped on doesn't let them know that their mother committed adulty and ended the marriage. In this story, the wife had nearly gotten a free pass until her own son held her to account. Good for him. It sounds like the wife still doesn't get it though even at the end of this version of the story.
Thanks for sharing your work with us.