All Comments on 'Sweet Relief'

Well done indeed = a sweet tale which obviously leads to a happy life for the three of them. Understated but all the better for it. Thank you

Excellent story. One question. A paragraph begins "Linh didn't replay with words, only looking up at him." Is it "replay" or "reply"? Looking forward to some sequels about these two.

Thanks for a great story!

Good beginning! Could use a follow up.

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Wonderful story, 10 stars! Please write another chapter. Jack needs her in his life, and Linh needs Jack, and that beautiful 6 yr. old, she may become Linh's daughter, and a big sister to her siblings...

A little fast for me. It was more erotic coupling than Romance,

Otherwise, very well done.

I agree with Both Anonymous & Boyd Percy a little too fast and could use some follow up.

The story line is great but as you see, you will have many asking for more parts.

More Romance!. A relationship between Linh and Caitlyn would help cement Jack's & Linh romance.

There were couple of pronoun mix ups and a name mix up and I bet a typo of Ling instead Linh.

All are fixable you might want to use a volunteer editor for help.

Thank you to everyone who left a comment and feedback. It is HUGELY appreciated.

I'm just starting out in the writing scene so I really love the constructiveness in these comments.

I'll be taking all comments and feedback into consideration.

Thank you again, wholeheartedly.