All Comments on 'Swingers' Surprise'

I'm one your biggest fans, but this type of story appears not to be your best. Keep writing stories like "Mother and Son" and you'll keep all of your fans happy.

You are a skilled writer. Chapter Two was probably the best description of (let's say) intercourse I've ever read -- a pleasant surprise in what is often a wasteland of talent in Lit.

the first comments. Quit writing.

Stick with what you know. Not this type of story.

i loved how zeke totally took over and is more than man enough to love and take both women at will! that little pissy ass danndy deserved what he got which was nuthin! he could ahve had two hot sexy bitches to fuck him all the time and another stud to help keep his wife happy

he should have taken it and not been such a baby. whaaaa whaaaa im gunna take my toys and go home!

This is a prime example of why people should never swing. You wind up with a tattooed whore. He was lucky to get rid of the fucking bitch.

This is undiluted crap. Poor story line, characters meekly developed and the sex totally unconvincing. To make matters worse it is interwoven with a sickening selfishness totally divorced from reality. Pity there is not a lower rating than 1.

When you don't like the people, the story sucks, pluss it's stupid and total bullshit. Why did you write this?

You have he walk away from marriage and into fucking loserville with no consequences. Do you somehow thing a whore like her is desirable? The fact that she fucked over a man who loved her for a loser at a car dealership?

Well she's a cow at 140 lbs, though fucked over hubby is a swamy wimp at 145.

A good ending would be hubby blowing her brains out, shooting zekes cock off, and a nice bullet up zekes bimbo wife's crotch.

Gotta say, I didn't like it much. I don't like stories that glorify cheating. There's way to much hurt going on in real life. Why sound time writing stories about cheating sluts thar get away with hurting people?

Your stories in the past have been good but as other people have already commented is the worst story you have ever written. If this is the trend of your future stories then you need to take a real look and possibly find a new hobby.

SHIT! SHIT! PURE SHIT! NOTHING BUT SHIT! I don't think I want to read anymore of your shit!

Hated it. Please stick with consensual mother-son stories with a happy ending.

Well written, enjoyable story. If guys getting cuckholded isn't your thing, then don't read it people! It's amazing to me how this type of story always gets angry comments. What do people expect when they read a loving wives story? You don't see people reading your incest stories and then saying "Gross! A mother having sex with her son! You disgust me!" C'mon people.

I so did not like this story. Something about it was just off.

I guess the incest lovers don't want you wasting your time. I really enjoyed the story a LOT!! I'd love to see you write more. You certainly know how to keep the heat turned up!

are those that are made against another comment. Give your opinion to the author about the story and don't, I repeat, don't spout off your unwanted opinion to other readers. Not needed. Each person has his own opinion, if it differs from yours, so what? Well written author, but not my kind of story. Your female character went way beyond swinging and your male character was unable to control his marriage. Divorce was the only alternative. There was nobody to relate to in this tale. Thanks for the effort. ML

read this crap story but made a point to give it 1 star until these people move these kind of stories to group sex or fetish category .

Okay, lol, I guess I walked into a buzzsaw here - that's okay - been there before. However, I require that all comments focus on the story and myself, making no personal attacks on other readers. Nasty comments towards each other will result in deletion. Otherwise, tell me what you feel, although elaborating intelligently on why you thought it was shit would be very constructive.

In the meantime, I guess I'll dust myself off and try again.

Melissa didn't want to swing, and Danny did. They went through a few couples and then Melissa falls hard for Zeke and his bisexual wife. Danny had a good thing, and then screwed himself over by swinging. End of story.

Danny was a selfish douche and I think he got what he deserved. It is sad that their marriage broke up, but even if they didn't meet Zeke and Donna I think it still would've failed. Melissa made the right choice by leaving.

Ahab I thought you wrote a great story and this is coming from a guy who hated the Stimulus Plan Slut series for almost a year, but I read them again and ended up giving them all 5's. Same thing will happen to this story.

It takes time to get over the shock of some of your writing however the main reason why I wasn't bothered with this story: I was rooting for Zeke and Donna when I read it the second time around :D

Don't know whose worse the slut wife in this story or the pathetic author whose storyline is so boring. Stick to your day job

I've read most, if not all, of your stories, and with rare exception, there is always something in them for me to enjoy. This story however...not only was the worthless slut of a wife a pathetic, despicable example of humanity, but she was (with no intervening development) portrayed as the wronged party! The husband was an idiot, a wimpy idiot no less, and none of the characters had a single redeeming quality. The whole "slut wife addicted to massive ubercock decides that she feels superior to her husband because she is pathetically, disgustingly, dependent on another mans genitialia in order to affirm her worth in this world" plotline was not only boring, but also intensely annoying. It got to the point where I actually thought that inserting a cheesy "epic fail husband snaps and kills everybody in a homicidal rampage" cathartic episode might make it better! And it wasn't because I "hated that bitch and wanted her to die" because that would imply that the character had enough depth to evoke an emotional response (other than basic disgust) from the reader. No, it was because inserting such an ending would wrap up a decidedly unsatisfying story with a moderately intriguing "fuck it all" type finale, lending a sort of surreal nature to the painful sterility of the work. Kind of like "modern art." you know it's just a piece of steel, but if it's made to look like a literal piece of shit, it lends a self-reflective, meta quality to it, that just might make it artistic. Unfortunately, that isn't what happened here. It began painfully, and it ended -impossible though it may seem- even more painfully.

As I stated, very disappointing. Luckily though, you went on to write far better works! So there's that, at least, to take solace in.

-a devoted reader (not kidding)

wow, just lately started reading comments before the story,,,so,,,

I did not like this story. In fact I found it repulsive. An essential ingredient of any good story, erotic or otherwise, is that it bears enough similarity to real-world human interactions that it seems plausible, at least in principle. This story lacks this property. The characters are ugly caricatures of human beings, and their intercourse, both general and sexual, seems like a scene from hell. The intensity of my reaction arises partly from your wonderful ability to express human thoughts and emotions through your mastery of written verbal communication. You have expressed your thoughts here so effectively that this otherwise potentially unpleasant story has become, for me, absolutely disgusting. In this story, I feel that you have squandered your gift on a subject unworthy of your skill. Indeed, I find this one product of your creativity so repugnant that I just cannot enjoy it from any perspective.

I have very much liked the several other stories of yours that I've read so far, and I do plan to read further from your collection. I urge you to return to the kind of story that will inspire pleasant fantasies. Ultimately, I suppose that it is the pleasant "aftertaste" of reading fiction that motivates me to keep reading further fiction of any kind. This story just does not inspire pleasant dreams. It is more likely to inspire nightmares. In fact, even though it is still quite a few hours before I must retire at the end of this day, I feel compelled to defend myself from nightmares by reading something happy in order to wash the bitter taste of this story from my consciousness.

You can definitely do better, and I hope you will redirect your considerable creative skill toward more worthy subjects in the future.

I had a feeling Danny was toast as soon as we met Zeke (love that name!) and Donna. A well written roller coaster of a story. The characters were engrossing and believable,I've known people like them.The sex is astonishing.. That's the idea, isn't it?

Well written, drew me in, made me like or dislike the characters. A great story but didn't make me want to start wanking.

Danny, the husband, wanted to start swinging and handpicked the couples to see that his wife got the duds and he got the better of the two. He could not stand the competition. I do not care to swing, never did but he brought this on himself. An entertaining story, Ahabscribe.

i Love reading the comments in this genre , more than i do reading the actual stories ..

what i find really funny about the comments on this story , is that nearly every comment could & should have been written by a dumbass named DANNY

I have read almost all of your stories and think you are a magnificent author. Your descriptions are so clear that I feel as if I'm there. This story was fantastic and so well written. How I wish I could find a "Zeke" for me (love that name!!!). I have read most of the comments and I don't understand the negative ones but, different strokes for different folks. I am a HUGE fan of this remarkable writer so I want to say thank you, Ahabscribe, for sharing your gift with the world.

HUBBY SHOULD HAVE HAD THE GUTS TO BEAT THE SHIT OUT OF ZEKE AND HER SORRY ASS....

Congratulations, you managed to write a story where a hate each and every character in it.

Or rather I instead of a.

See you are mostly incest stories. No wonder.

I don't particularly like cockold stories either but this was not a cockold story despite what some readers have said. Danny knew what he was doing when he set up the previous swings but this one didn't work out his way so he cried bloody murder. His wife got the better deal this time and Danny couldn't handle it. How the asshole commenters misinterpreted that FACT annoys me big time. It was a well written and conceived story and earned 5 stars and "favorite story" IMHO. More LW stories from you would be welcomed.

I like most of your stories, but this one made me remove you from my favorite author's list. Reason? The horror in this story is unabated even in its conclusion. I could not read it all but did skip to see how you ended it. Still no surcease. I honestly doubt there are many people in the real world a cruel as that woman. There certainly should not be any in a story supposedly designed to create eroticism.

OK. End of rant.

One of the worst cheating whore, cuck and swinging stories I've ever encountered.

I have never been a fan of sharing & cheating stories, but here the real cheat is Danny'boy.

For a story that's well crafted & shows Melissa's awakening to the subtle deviousness of her husband, the 3.94 rating felt insulting.

Its really pathetic when a person gives a low vote coz they felt humiliated after reading it.

It would be wise to use this story as life lesson to make sound choices or to live with(grow/thrive) the choices you make.

Remember you chose to read it. Complaining in childish manner makes you look even more pathetic than Danny'boy.

Possibilities to be hot.... but as usual, everything went to the extreme. No nuance, no shades of gray. It quickly descended into cliché and stereotype.

This is exactly what swinging will get you, a destroyed marriage. Zeke with his bigger longer cock took Mellissa from Daniel as he mad Daniel insignificant as Daniel could no longer satisfied her.

In the end it was Daniel's fault he lost Melissa to Zeke as he pushed Melissa into swinging in the first place for his own selfish reasons and he ended up the big loser, losing his wife and his marriage. Well written and I give it a 5 star vote

What a whore

Outstanding story, great read

not my kind of story

There are fantasies, but then there are fantasies. This one is a load of crap. Setting aside the simplistic moralist commenters, how would a thrupple survive in the world of children and legal arrangments? Say, old Zeke gets crippled and unable to provide? Or worse yet, the threesome becomes unstable when one gets pregnant and child support comes into play where only one is the legal spouse? And neither the husband Daniel or the wife Melissa act as even normal swingers would. She would be mentally unstable to do behave like that towards an established spouse, and his walking away without a struggle is nonsense too. This was not a well written fantasy as the characters are not even interesting. And, BTW, I didn't read it indepth. Didn't have too. A skim was all it took. In a word, the story was puerile.

This story is built around the interesting premise that a 'big cock' rules all. But I wonder given the size of the average vaginal canal and the average penis size. Is there such a thing as too small? Probably, but an extraordinarily large penis and 'enjoyment' of that sounds like it's a form of athleticism high, related to an exercize rush, perhaps? Or perhaps someone who enjoys pain? Taking on a huge prod as a form of BDSM? Such a strange theme for a story. Much too trite, like this tale. What did the one recent commenter say? Peurile.

Great story, even though it's rated quite low compared to your other stories. It definitely ruffles the sensitivities of your reader base (as expected). I thought the conniving limp-dicked husband got just what he deserved and was happy for the wife's newfound fulfillment. Also having another woman/wife involved balanced the cuckold. After all, what's good for the goose is good for the gander. This story as most of your stories has a very interesting and creative angle, it's very well written, and is smoldering hot. It would have a much higher rating from an author with a "loving wife" reader base! I gave it 5 stars. It is pure fantasy after all. No one is really getting put out, and I do enjoy a lot of different erotic genres.

Yet another story about how a couple getting into swinging ends in divorce it will always be that way those kinds of relationships as well as open relationships can never work they will always end badly