All Comments on 'T.G.I.F.'

I liked your story until you threw the virgin thing in there, and the whole "innocence and love beyond description," none of which made sense in the context of the story. If you're going to make the woman a virgin, make it believable. None of her actions or comments make her out to be a virgin, rather, she sounds a little slutty and experienced. She came on to him in a bathroom for god's sake. No woman wants to lose her virginity in a bathroom.