All Comments on 'Take Action'

To many words and too much going over the same old stuff.

I don't half blame her. Husband talks like he has Porsche gear stick up his ass.

Excellent entry for your first effort....I hope that if they reconcile in part two you have some plot device to make the wife earn the trust she so easily dismissed. I hope it's not the standard wife shows up and winds up in bed with the husband and current girlfriend and all is hunky dory with husband having a lifelong threesome.

Thanks for the effort but the story is not my cup of tea. The husband is a wimp and the dialogue became boring.

Nothing new here.. stopped reading after the post-nup cos it was evident where this was going.. 2*

....is this guy a masochist or something? His character didn't make a lot of sense, felt contrived and forced to fit an ending the author wanted rather then the ending his characters were originally painting.

Also pieces of plot were brought forth and left dangling not even a paragraph later that left everything feeling very disjointed. "Should I watch the other videos?" "Please don't" And that doesn't come back up at all? Would anyone really NOT look at ALL the video later to, if nothing else, reaffirm their decision when the pain made them question themselves?

Lastly, as an avid fan of revenge dramas (it's not like we actually see much justice in our world these days after all) this was anything but BTB. I wouldn't have cared either way (I like tales were characters are allowed to paint themselves to whatever conclusion that may be), but I definitely wouldn't have tagged it that way. His only revenge was keeping the lion share of his own business's selling price. That's not revenge, that's common sense.

The story is little longer..more descriptive but quite gripping. Expect the later ending to be a happy one...

Not a good effort. After she caused so much pain he agreed to give her a chance to prove she could be trusted and she turned around and proved she had no respect or love left for him. He should have enforced the post-nup just like they had agreed. The last little bit about her joining the happy couple for the rest of their trip is just sad. Try to think your next story through a little better.

Long winded, at least 3 pages TOO long!

Forget everything else, why go through this much misery? She cheated, she signed the divorce papers - the end. Why play games? 25 years of marriage with kids often does NOT make people more in love. Sure they are bonded by time, but 25 years of arguments and compromises is wearing, not passionate. So, at the end of 25 years she takes off the gloves and beats the heart right out of him and he thinks it is a good idea to get back in the ring with her? Not believable. Especially for a successful man. He would have lots of options, with lots of women, some of them trustworthy! All of them younger and more attractive than the slut.

We as your audience trust you not to lead us in winding circles. To put it in an analogy, let's say you were driving a taxi and we got in at Rockefeller center and asked you to take us to Madison Square Garden. Well if the taxi ride went like this story, then we got there via Queens ! 3*'s

Cpprcrk

You write well but the plot is weak. Obviously, it would be devastating to learn that your spouse of 25 years is cheating on you but you delivered the discovery in the most unbelievable way. Ann was the family organizer. He was selling her business for several millions of dollars and she was not involved? She would be more interested in her business than he would be. If she had lost respect for him she would be even more interested in the money as she cashed out of the relationship. Her leaving the evidence in the car is on the Stangster level of stupid. I didn't read the middle pages because I found the idea that they would go to bed and sleep together without a serious discussion after he has her sign the divorce papers and then disclose that he knows she was cheating on him. I find it hard to believe the writer is married. Their interaction is unbelievable. You did a lot of work for nothing. Who gives a fuck about these stupid self-centered rich people. You don't go from a loving couple to roommates overnight. Your story should have shown the devolution of their relationship especially since you make the husband the master of the universe. It should have been 3.5 stars for a first effort but I rounded up to 4.

Try again in another story but I could not care less about what happens to these characters.

reasonable man

A Good first effort. The characters are believable.

I gave it a three. It was technically written well but I didn't feel the characters' emotions. It lacked something, but I'm not sure what. Maybe the dialogue had me disconnected from the characters. I couldn't imagine anyone actually speaking like that.

Nice attempt though. You will get better in time.

I did not consider this to be a long story, but it bored me pretty quickly. The characters were all announced and defined within your paragraphs and then ...

What the characters did was to interact in exactly the manner telegraphed by there method of introduction. No build up and then an unhappy ending to their marriage and he moved on.

Wow. An affair, a pregnancy, an abortion, not an empty box but a ready supply of morning after pills indicating continued unprotected sex, too many broken promises and outright lies to list but first and foremost would be meeting "post affair" (yeah, right) with the last(?) paramour, and a genuine and profound disrespect for husband lead to the conclusion that this woman has absolutely no understanding of consequences to decisions and actions, none whatsoever. I am at a total loss about how you felt sorry for her enough to have the post-nuptual agreement ignored AND continue this mess into a second chapter. I'm not putting you personally into your male character's shoes, I'm truly confused from the actions you chose for her as the author why you felt sorry enough for her to spend time on a baseless reconciliation. I prefer justice stories and can accept reconciliation when it can be intelligently supported. This character did and has done nothing to afford giving her a fourth chance, two more than she had any right to expect.

3* for some good in the story, there was no BTB here, could and should have been, then inviting her back into your like, you know suicide wish.

1/5

for annony the asshole of LIT!

VOTE 1* FOR EVERY STORY RATED BY THAT TRANNY BITCH FOOL VASTIESMITH2 AKA BONNIETAYLOR2 AKA ANON!

While I don't think that a separation ("3 month exile") was the correct solution, it seemed like they BOTH missed the point. She had been cheating (duh!), but perhaps more important to this character, she had been withholding love, intimacy, cooperation, and everything else ON TOP OF THE BETRAYAL! To me, the 'exile' was supposed to be HER understanding the SAME lack of love, bond and relationship. Give her a chance to miss what was previously there, but taken for granted - so to speak. The monitoring was a no brainer. Perhaps he should have hired someone to watch the videos for him, to spare himself some of the pain. Whatever. Here is the crazy part. The videos show that she couldn't control herself, even for such a brief period of time. More than a calculated act, there is evidence of compulsion, or perhaps addiction. Whatever solution these people seek out, intense therapy would have to be the starting point.

You admit that YOU the author just couldn't help but feel sorry for her and so you tried to engineer the RAAC ending. But while feeling sorry for her, what happened to the empathy for him? Why is it necessary to turn the guy into a wimpering pushover desperate to give this unhealthy woman any latitude? The inconsistency in how you develop his character's reactions actually repel the reader, and make sympathy for his plight impossible. Oh boo-hoo, let's feel sorry for the rich guy with his new Yacht!!!! NOT!!!!!

Even giving her a share of the loot and booty, this guy should have more than enough with which to start over and find PLENTY of other fish in the sea. And you hint that he does just that with Pam, his new first mate, right? But the problem with this story, is that the character you created can't enjoy any of his success, because he is a glutton for punishment and a target for deception, just like all cucks are written to be in LW stories. So the ending feels: WTF?! And the next chapter where you delve even deeper into his wimpyness seems like it will be an introspective exercise well worth skipping.

Sorry, can't rate higher than a 3.

But I do appreciate your efforts, so thanks.

for annony the asshole of LIT!

for annony the asshole of LIT! All of you!!

Pretty good first post.A tough genre to start out in.Keep writing.

The story started well enough, but later it just became dumb and longwinded. Have you ever heard the definition of stupidity given by Einstein? It is to do something again and again and expect different results, and this is what happens with your RAAC in this story. You're feeling pity for Ann's character and making your characters act in the way of some unrealistic and ridiculous soap opera to satisfy that pity.

There is no one alive that thinks or talks like this.

She not only betrayed her husband over and over . She even went so far as killing the baby or was that the first baby she had 2 more kill kits in the car,how many baby's died so she could cheat. Months of unprotected sex and only two baby's not believable .Why no birth control if she was cheating .This shows how much she only cared about herself. Why does Mark get a free pass he feels bad helping her cheat what does he feel about his cheating why was his wife not told. And where was Marks wife this morning when she was giving him his going away gift. I agree this husband is a pity puppy for pain. But I see a wimp cum sucking cuckold. To many holes in this story not sure there is any reason for them to let her on the boat . Ok my wife said they could take her to Marks and drop her off ,I say throw her worthless ass overboard.

eat shit bonnietaylor2

for MONTHS, darling non-working wife treats husband like shit and is never home... hmmm... what could she be up to...?

deal with it or leave LW section!!

Dumb and dumber. I had to struggle to finish this crap. Can't any author write about people with more than half a brain anymore?

CUCKS, RAAC, mind-numbing boring dialogue and NO SEX. Why would you post this here?

Could you try writing real people??? Who talks like that??? One boring dialog after another!! Just bad.

Gave this a 5 because you didn't like it. But hell you hate everything!!

5 for upsetting the asshole of LIT

VOTE 1* FOR EVERY STORY RATED BY THAT TRANNY BITCH FOOL VASTIESMITH2 AKA BONNIETAYLOR2 AKA ANON!

Unbelievable, BonnieCUNT now wants to teach people how to write!

How you are going to be able to do what you intend to do and forge a reconcilation.

And having her accept a co equal position for Pam will not end well. Wanderlust will once again take the front row and Ann will end up "Flotsum"

You have written a very good tale of how the protagonist (Brian) deals with residual emotional love and infidelity from his long-time spouse. However, as you have written Ann, she is untrustworthy. If you were to write a follow-on chapter, you should write it from her perspective. Go ahead and give Mark the obligatory big dick and fat wallet if you must, but really spend the time exploring the sea change that Ann experienced that ended in her dismissal of her promises and vows to Brian. Otherwise, end the story as it is now and let Brian realize (to paraphrase Freud and many others), "Sometimes a lying, cheating, untrustworthy Bitch is, at the end of it all, just a lying, cheating, untrustworthy bitch."

This man here is so pathetic.

The wife a true whore.

I can never understand why men are portrayed to be so fecking weak.

Grow a pair.

You are rich, so move on.

Enjoy life.

To the universe your life may be insignificant, but to you your life should be all the matters...

to help offset the asshole of LIT's vote

I basically enjoyed it, and probably would have given it 4 stars. But I only gave it 2 stars because you totally dropped the ending. It was like you got to a point and just said to yourself "okay, I'm gonna stop now".

and even cheaters have to sleep, TK U MLJ LV NV

I could not believe the end! You went from 5 to a 2 in about 5 lines. Seriously you can not have thought this was a good ending for this. She cheats and treats him like shit, gets a second chance WITH a post nup and cheats again and he asks her to join them? Not in any world I live in.

Had me guessing to the end and you threaded the needle perfectly when he divorced her but didn't hold her to the new prenup. Very original. And captured well the seething conflict between anger and love in the husband right to the bittersweet end when he takes mercy on her even as he severs their relationship. Stand up guy even when his heart is breaking (traditional btb aficionados will never comprehend this nuanced complexity, the grays of all marriages, just the black and white of revenge). . Even a potential for reconciliation. Will it happen? Write about when she joins him on the trip. Will she finally see the true error of her ways? Will they get back together? Or will he finally get her out of his system, and get with Pam? I hope you write the answers. So, tremendous props and kudos. 5* well earned.

Shy? Not so sure here. I enjoyed the story and characters up until the "exile". I had no problem with the cooling off period, it actually made sense to me. But why set up to monitor and then Not monitor? Then we have another instance when Ann is -again- pulling away and Brian reacts the same way as he did the first time, just goes about his business. Just sort of mulling over the incident(s). That made no sense. Why didn't he immediately check the logs, watch what was going on and verify her location?! Up until this point in the story it was going well. You lost me there though as I figured he was a wimp to just let things go - despite the history and the means to check on Ann's activity and his lack of desire to do it.

I still marked it well - it is a first time effort. Thanks for sharing and please keep writing.

The stody was rather long and the plot got there in the end.

The story really did not describe the wife's actions and there was no sex scenes.

If this is intentional then the emotional aspect has to be very strong within the story.

To me the husband character was just a little to stupid and naive.

Also the ending implies there is a possible sequel !

3 - 3 1/2 pages max, many repeated sentences/paragraphs. Understand the attempt to reconcile after such a long marriage, but dumb bitch just didn't get it. However the final sentence makes absolutely no sense at all. 3*

This is really a great story. It's all about communication. Spouses have to talk and understand each other. They have to work through rough spots. My guess is that if there is a next chapter it will present three very happy people in a new, interesting relationship. Much more open communication. Thanks for great story, hope you continue it. xoxoxoxo Annette

The ending ruined it. Maybe in part 2 she comes down, and he feeds her to the sharks, and tells the kids that she shouldn't have went swimming when she was on the rag!

This was a very good story, but in needs a follow up to the ending. You left the door wind open to a part two -- what will the future hold for Ann and Brian when she meets him in Panama? It seems that Brian is not over Ann (and she is certainly not over him), and that there is a possibility of reconciliation.

I gave it 4 stars for being a great read, except for the ending. Hopefully there will be another installment which will further enhance and properly close the story. Granted there was much redundancy throughout but that only seemed to solidify the characters rather than downplay the story, which in my opinion requires another chapter. As you see here in my comment, redundence can be required to prove a point. thanks for your offering and look forward to more from you.

but in the end he wimped out. Why even bother with the post-nup. He might as well learn to enjoy sucking cum out of her cheating cunt. It's in his dna and he will eventually find himself in that place.

He invited her on to the boat at the end. Not a good ending.

So new girl has u all alone on a boat and she suggests that u invote the liar slut wife along ???? Is she secretly a bisexual hottie?

What kind of ending was that. She blew the deal and he was generous to leave her with her assets. Now he invites her on the trip with pam in Panama. You've got be kinding me.

“I realized I did not care if I was to blame. She was the one cheating." – EXACTLY! Even if he DID do SOMETHING to cause her to feel neglected or whatever, she should TALK to him about what her problem(s) is/are BEFORE cheating! LOL, he said pretty much the same thing!

Even IF you wanted to buy the “excitement” excuse for the affair itself, that doesn’t explain the distancing herself from Brian, the coldness, the lack of sex, etc., etc., etc.

If it wasn’t bad enough taking up with Mark again, she broke TWO consecutive Wednesday meetings with Brian, I assume to see Mark.

“Divorce me if you must but don't push me out of your life." – They share two children they’re NEVER going to be completely out of each other’s lives!

The ending is a cop out, and why was it needed, since the next version is supposedly going to be RAAC?

sorry...3 stars...that ending just blew whole story...no MAN would take that twice...

and now he wants her to join them????WTF?????????

don't care if you write a sequel but I won't read it....

She broke his trust.

She broke it AGAIN when she was supposed to be earning his trust back.

He REWARDS her be NOT holding her to the post-nup, and if I read things correctly even gave her more assets than she got in the original divorce, then invites her to join him and Pam on the cruise.

And your NEXT version has a reconciliation? What is THIS if not a reconciliation? Just because he went through with the divorce doesn't mean that they're not reconciling! If it wasn't reconciliation she wouldn't be invited on the trip - unless he's going to be fucking Pam while she listens/watches/joins in?!?

Ann has a lot of issues to work out still, and should get some therapy. However, I don't think they will remarry . . . it looks more like he will spend the rest of his life with Ann and Pam. Ann may not like it, but it's that, or not be with him at all . . .

My issue with the ending is what you did but how. It didn't flow and come together. Otherwise a really good story.

Now about Pam , Ann and Brian when will that Chapter come. I think he did the right thing in Divorcing her but to invite her to go on the Boat afterwards. She will have a hard time dealing with Brian & Pam being close.

Great story and I gave it a 4. But, Mark got away with without a blemish and is off to merry old England. If there were some payback to for him I could have gone for a 5. He ruined a marrige and then, when there was at chance at redeption for Ann, he still selfishly persued her, and consequently, screwed the pooch again. Brian, man up! OP, give your boy a pair.

You were so close to a good story until your candy ass ending.

Lets see pregnacy abortion slut clothes total emtional detachment from the marriage... And boxesof morning after pill....

And the husbands reaction is the marriage hit a snag?

I made it through the first few chapters untill Dufus husband was stupid enough to gave her the keys to his jeep instead of getting in the BMW with her and then later answering her cell phone when lover boy called when she didnt show to meet him.

Hope i didnt miss anything.

Sorry, make that "paragraphs" instead of chapters.

So take this with a grain of salt.

I did not finish this. Why?

He was too perfect. What woman in her right mind would, as he is written, cheat on him?

She made no sense. First she could not care less for him...then she was a blubbering wreck desperate to fix things.

Little things. A lawyer who has a MULTI MILLIONAIRE client just...at the snap of the fingers, has bullet proof divorce papers ready. Certainly they are not going to bill the hell out of a well heeled client. Because Lawyers are well known for their efficient, cost effective services, reasonably priced services.

It was overwritten. The bones of this story was the description of the relationship (good) the clue, the confrontation and the third protagonist, the money (the money should not be a protagonist. It's only use is a whip to beat the woman with)

So on this rather spare frame, which JPB would make into a two or three page tale, tops, you added a lot of fat but not a lot of muscle, because the story didn't GO anywhere. Little movement except him sitting around thinking and pissing and moaning about his worries and thoughts.

Now...I would be remiss to not mention one thing I did like. His challenge to the wife to just open the door...nicely done.

You need to learn to strip your story down to essentially and make it DO something. There needs to be more conflict. Sitting around reading conversations isn't exciting.

Meh If I ranked it, it would be 2.5 stars. The people were not credible (a quy that rich and perfect would be socializing with a bunch of OTHER guys with trophy wives and women looking for exactly what he offers among the divorced) The writing...well, here is a hint. Read this yourself and count how many times he asks 'how could she do this to 25 year marriage'. And answer me why I should read this more than two or three times max.

so he takes his anger out on a story and a writer who provides a FREE story to him! Gave you a 5 for a great read.

Very unreal since I can not imagine a loving wife like this going off the rails exactly when they were finishing up their life project. But what she did with Mark during her exile makes no sense whatsoever. Therefore, hearing that she had an abortion with one guy and then dug up another I would say bye, bye. But as I said I read the whole thing and found the invite at the end and almost had an AVC

please don't make this a 3-way relationship.

Thank you for your efforts.

for cucks who luv being cucks

just one more 1 star cuck tale wish hadn't skimmed thru.

raises a good point.

Thank you for the free story. You are generous to do that.

I am required to be grateful, but that does not mean I have to enjoy it, any more than I have to enjoy a badly cooked meal. It was not a horrible or even bad story, but it had much room for improvement.

Also note: My issues are primarily about the writing. If I did or did not buy the story, or like the story, that is a VALUE judgment. However, writing is a bit more objective than if I am a BTB reader or one who likes to read about cream pies.

Now, I could just jerk you off and say 'FIVE STARS' but you would never improve, would you? If you serve up a burnt pie to a guy who can tell you how to avoid burning a pie, do you want him to just chow down or tell you how to bake a pie?

It is your choice. The author can make his vote with a delete of these comments.

very stupid story starts off with ann then on and on and fucking on and then ends up with her anyway just stop no more makes no sence this idiot goes around and around in circles and as mentioned winds up with the bitch any, STUPID, please no more.

WTF....what a simply ass husband....just on and on and on...blabbing.. ugh...should have kicked her ass the first time...OR should have divorce her with the prenuptial agreement....throw her yo the street and let her whore herself to survive.

I FUCKING HATE WIMPY ASS HUSBAND STORIES..

AND YOU WRITER..YOU SHOULD B FLOGGED 500LASHES FoR YOUR STUPID WIMPY STORY...BETTER STILL GO KILL YOURSELF ASS HOLE.

WAA, WAA, WAA... what a simpering eunich of a character. That‘s minutes of my life I’ll never get back.

I really didn't liked the plot and the characters...She had an abortion on his back...wasn't that enough? Let's pretend that a heart like his, ready to forgive everything existed: Would that heart forgive the second time cheating, after she begged his forgiveness and promised not to meet or talk to her lover again? I don't think so...I can understand that he didn't want to use the postnuptial agreement, but never would accept her back, even she was an unhappy woman...she was the one to chose her own destiny...twice...2*

Another story about a stupid man and a cheating slut. Why would anyone with enough sense to pour piss out of a boot want to be within fifty miles of the cheating slut that destroyed their marriage? The cheating slut even proved beyond a doubt that she would cheat again after getting caught the first time. The husband has no balls, no sense and not even a hint of self respect to even contemplate being anywhere near the cheating slut of a bitch.

The reader may or may not like the story-personally I thought the guy was an idiot, particularly at the end, but that's just my opinion.

What is indisputable, however, is that you need an editor and a proofreader. The story was too long and repetitious, 'discreet' wasn't spelled correctly, 'disinterest' doesn't mean what you think it does, etc., etc,...the list of basic errors is very long.

Folks - the votes are in. Just another pathetic cum-sucking faggot cuckold who gets off on the role-play version of wimp & despicable slut tired plot device.Sad bullshit! Author - fucking go away and quit polluting this site with the garbage shit.

dont give away the story in the preview. Your mentioning the next part would be a reconciliation will lose you many potential readers bc we already know now that he will take her back. I'd also get an editor because there were some typos in your story. As for the story, i have to agree with alot of the other comments.... dude seems like a wimp. I get that they were married for 25 years but cmon-- she cheats with two guys, gets an abortion. I had to end right there because i think you should have made the abortion issue much bigger. She basically killed her unborn baby and then still went back to cheating on her husband! Then she still met with Mark and probably had sex with him after everything came to light. In the off chance that you read this comment before you post part 2 please, please dont have him take her back

Yes . . . make it a three-way. Ann and Pam can explore their budding bisexuality and he can enjoy both women. Also, have them - all three - marry each other and live happily ever after . . . and throw in another abortion or two. It can be fun to frustrate the btb'ers, and you write thoughtfully enough that they'll always be pissed anyway, so may as well take it up a notch.

Part 2 please and not getting back with Ann but marrying Pam. Now that would be a different ending, especially since Pam is inviting her to sail.

Very unrealistic and wooden. No feeling. Poorly constructed. Time frames make no sense... Actions make no sense. Characters are moronic. Things happen in unrealistic ways. Details are missing. Details are provided that are unnecessary. Tenses are messed up and scenes out of order. Just bad.

for effort and content. Loved the story

Of a marriage. It's all about value, how much do you value your spouse? It seems Ann valued hers not enough to be faithful. Brian valued her enough to give her a 2nd chance, which she blew. So now they can be - - fuck buddies? Saint Brian should be more careful and hire a high class escort.

DHL

this one was bad enough for both

VOTE 1* FOR EVERY STORY RATED BY THAT TRANNY BITCH FOOL VASTIESMITH2 AKA BONNIETAYLOR2 AKA ANON!

I know people hate revenge or reconciliation but he tried even when it would have been way past anyone to forgive. Being married I can't understand how anyone would forgive in that situation. Cheating is bad enough she fuck some guy got pregnant, had an abortion and broke up with the guy only to fuck someone else and start a new affair. No forgiveness there, she would never convince me she would be honest and faithful. Also he leans toward forgiveness and she can't hold out 3 months without fucking the same guy. PLEASE NO RECONCILIATION HERE. She has no respect for him , herself or her kids and hubby will show how little he thinks of himself if he goes back to her. What many don't realize besides the act of cheating after being married go so many years is the other thoughts you put the spouse through and some may be juvenile but true. Is his dick bigger, he must fuck better, does she do things for him she has never done with me, do they verbally abuse me while he fucks her , how many people know from his end and are they abusing me, how will my kids and family look at me now and especially if I stay with her, was the past 25 years a fraud just to keep a lifestyle, are the kids really mine, how would I know if she was doing this from day one, and she could never convince me ever again she truly loves me because if she did this never have happened. If she wasn't scared straight after the pregnancy than she will never be . He's wealthy retired in good shape and could find many woman that is in in similar situation to love him and there time together. He could hold his head up high knowing he did the right thing by his ex and stay friendly toward her for the kids sake but NO WAY STAY WITH HER. How on gods earth could she even expect it unless which she has proven in her actions that she really has zero respect for him. Please no reconciliation here , I don't mind it when it calls for it but this story is really way off from getting back together. Kids are big there is no reason for it at all just walk away with some self respect and start over

You write well but WTF!!! Brian needs to seriously GROW A SET!! Reconciliation???? Are you out of your fucking mind??? How many times does Ann need to fuck around on him before he gets enough?? Sounds to me like he wants to watch her and wack off in the corner. If anything the next chapter needs to be finding Sir Mark and unleashing the hounds of hell on him. That's what needs to happen to men that knowingly chase married woman.

Ick ! OBS

I gave you 4* for the effort and having a fairly good plot.

However, too many things were disconnected or made little sense. All the bits add up to a longer term cheat and the disregard of the attempt to fix ... Outline it and connect the dots then add a timeline.

- A perfect bollocks free man

- A mindless emotional selfish woman

- Lots of money

- Perfect acting support cast

Still, a good try, hence the 4*. Recommend you fix the story then go for an alternative ending.

Luck. Look forward to more.

I enjoyed your story very much. I tend to enjoy the reconciliation stories more when there is true repentance. Don't see it in this case and there is more than just physical sex between Mark and the wife. I will be interested to see what basis for reconciliation you come up with in chapter 2.

.....but felt that your epilogue put paid to everything your protagonist said about his values. And it dis colored the whole thing for me.

It is not in my experience with successful entrepreneurs for them to be this waffle-y and indecisive. The construct of the 3 months exile only served to put iron to his original response. And he should have exercised the full weight of the post-nup.

She earned it. And it would have been wise for him to "firm up his resolve" by looking through the entire library of recordings to see just how foolish and arrogant she was. The overly emotional, but unstated plea that "mom just sits at home and cries. She's tried dating but always finds something lacking", is just so much pity partying.

Ann was selfish, stupid, arrogant, narcissistic and overly self indulgent. She repeated all the same platitudes the wounded hear from their caught, cheating spouses. And, in the end, she did not change her stripes at all. I think he got it wrong when he said, "you were still focused on Mark", she was really still focused on her own gratification.

No matter how much he misses her, it is unhealthy to continue to indulge her and offer her company and recreation, when she should be daily experiencing the natural consequences of her choices and actions.....and he should be looking forward and moving on.cues, 25 years is hard to ignore. Betrayal, adultery, disrespect and the wanton destruction of the 25 years is infinitely harder to ignore.

Thanks for the offering.

How could this moron ever have been a successful businessman. I have a bridge I'd like to sell him. The whore should have been thrown out of the house with her suitcases the day she came home smelling like a whore after a day at work. I won't give any stars. If the follow up is a reconciliation, I won't be reading.

...when I thought about shooting you.

What crapola. May I send you a bill for the therapy you must have been seeking?

Please don't ever do this again. Especially over 5 fucking pages.

I enjoyed the read could have been better but could have been much worse plse keep writing. I was bothered most by him repeatedly saying he just didn't have time to work on his marriage. He knew things were wrong he just didn't have the time. This is all that is needed for disaster to strike any relationship.

You write very well and you tried to avoid the typical BTB response to a cheating spouse. However, there were several actions by Ann which after reading the story a second time made Brian's responses inadequate/unrealistic. First, we have a wife who for at least 4 months embark on a separate life with little to no interest in retirement with her husband. She had build a business into a property valuable enough to be bought by other firms - not a small accomplishment especially raising 2 kids. She get pregnant for 6 weeks, bought a brand new BMW 6 weeks ago and kept a bag to change into sexy clothe s for her lover. She made no real efforts to conceal her activities including coming into the house having just fucked her lover. After the confrontation with Brian she comes up with the reconciliation plan to lose all of her money if she cheats again. HELLO - she did not care about the money from the business she spent 15 years growing so why would the money make a difference?

She had done everything she could do to build a separate life from Brian. Note that she lied constantly directly to Brian. She spent time with Mark at the same time she knew Brian would call her early Saturday morning. She counted on Brian always taking her back no matter what she does so all of this guilt and crying was intended to let her do whatever she pleased. She spent no time thinking or caring about how her actions would effect Brian. You have to conclude that during this 3 month separation nothing had changed for Ann. It is one thing to live out the thrill of cheating thinking that Brian was clueless but Ann had been caught and given a second chance The videotape discussed were 2 weeks old showing Mark back with Ann. It is clear that she started fucking him again since she did not want Brian to see any later tapes. All of the above makes the epilogue so disappointing and unrealistic.

So Brian is with his new lady and he hears through the kids about Ann unhappiness then he invites her for the rest of their trip? Is this to be a threesome? How does inviting Ann allow Brian to move forward with his life? Would any woman assuming she is serious about forming a long term relationship with a guy invite the ex-wife?

The only real winner of this story was Ann. She created a separate life from Brian, enjoyed lovers, keeps the bulk of 4.5 Million from her business and still keep her relationship with Brian and the kids. Good story - I look forward to your next one!

I've read this before, and was reading the comments to see if I wanted to re-read (since most of the newer stories SUCK!), and I agree with the comment(s) that just because he went through with the divorce doesn't mean that this isn't ALREADY a reconciliation story, given the invite for the ex to join them,

She's a cheating slut and always will be, she proved that already. The husband was more than fair by giving her the house and money, I wouldn't have given her shit all. To even contemplate taking her back is beyond stupid. As someone else mentioned she was having unprotected sex so she was putting both their health and their lives at risk. Why would anyone want anything to do with someone who would do that, it just doesn't make sense.

His wife is a worthless whore. He's a masochist. Intent on making his life a giant pity party. Why he gave her all the money makes absolutely no sense. But, the whole story makes no sense.