All Comments on 'Take Me to Church Pt. 01'

POV swaps suck. Just learn to write in the 3rd person. It's not that difficult and 1000x better for the reader.

Anon: No. 😌 I enjoy writing this way and will continue to do so.

Wrex???

Who's called Wrex?

I love the poverty swaps my girlfriend and I take turns reading when it switches person

In regard to the name Wrex.

My husband chose this as his online alias. It is pronounced like Rex, which is a more common name. It means King. He added the W so it looked more like "wreck" which he often does to my ass.

Intriguing scenario - look forwards to more. POV is fine as a narrative perspective, but can be constraining. I suspect you could write dialogue equally well...

so hot

Cut out the comment about the room being used to punish children-it's neither acceptable behaviour nor appropriate to be associated with punishing a consenting adult.

Other than that, we'll...not very realistic but intriguing nonetheless. I liked that we were able to read his point of view. It's always a nice thing to do.

I really enjoyed the story and I'm looking forward to part two. I find you DD relationship intriguing. My wife and I are not in such a relationship as there is no spill over into the bedroom, but we do play with the dom/sub dynamic for sexual play. About 80% of the time she is the dominant and she uses the cane or a cat to spank me, and about 20% of the time I get to dom and use hand spanking and hairbrush spanking along with nipple clamps to encourage her obedience. This story is a fun scenario that I can share with her, and maybe we can engage in some fantasy role play with it.