All Comments on 'Taken by her best friend Ch. 01'

in the first full paragraph, she "didn't wear a bra or panties today" but in the next couple of paragraphs she took them off???

Had a bit of trouble following the story because the names were confusing

The plot is OK but you have your persons mixed up, Got to read this over or have an editor.

I volunteer if you want

You first say Annie is short and stocky, then later you say the "slim Asian asked". It made the story difficult to follow.

Sorry guys! I can’t believe I made those mistakes! I’ll try better next time I promise :(

Protip -- proofread your story before you submit it. Don't expect a first draft to be perfect.

In fact, don't trust yourself to catch all the errors even after you have been through it a few times. Get someone else to look at the story and see what mistakes they spot. Or several people. Beta-readers help A LOT.

... what they said.

This is too short; almost too short to comment on.