All Comments on 'Taken by Softie Orc Girl Pt. 01'

Great start but there appears to be some continuity issues between the pages as far as background and world building is concerned.

My 2 cents

A good start to an interesting story. You can run this story in several directions and play with the characters. I like the interaction between the main characters. Thanks for your time and your imagination.

@Amygdala:

I'd appreciate any criticism; I wrote this over a long time with interludes of mental problems. What went wrong?

I liked it, it was full of sweet awkwardness between two young people. Cograts for breaking the scheme of orcish girls being only dominating, rough or even brutal. Ghorza is sweet, a real gentle giantess :)

I have only minor issues about story, some words were rather oddly chosen, but I guess English isn't your native language. I think also that word "bodybuilder", does not fit into fantasy setup. But like I said l, it's not so important.

And one question, since that was my first contact with your writing - this world creation, stuff with some Demon Lord, Blight etc - it's only here or it is part of your universe?

Part of the universe.

Yes, that word was supposed to be into an "idiom" to lower the awkwardness.

I sure could use an editor, or people to discuss what to write.

MAD#9170 is my discord by the way.

Everything went great. Except probably the drow girls prancing bottomless in the woods.

It's unhygienic. Way to get some nasty stuff, including wood splinters, in places where it doesn't belong.

Also, mosquitoes.

Good example of a literotica story that doesn't need 24/7 sex to be a good story

Well written 👍

Please continue this one ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

I would use Gramerly for editing.

The story is Awesome, dead on balls perfect.

I am a Fan of Orc Women.

I can see why other races only exist in our fantasies.

If Aliens reading our stories come to the conclusion we desperately need Orcs and Elves on Earth.

That would be kick ass.

That was great. With all the monster girl asmr out there, I knew there had to be a growing Fandom of monster girl stories here. A wonderful, positive offering that was romantic, too. Keep having fun with your writing.