All Comments on 'Taking His Dreamgirl'

by Kmaf

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AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
Awesome!

Please tell me a sequel is coming soon!

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
Excellent

Great writing. And the just right level of disgusting story as always. Please give me more.

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
Fantastic!

Great writing, great plot. What's not to love? Hope you follow up this one soon

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
this is a copy

this is a copy of a older story posted

KmafKmafover 11 years agoAuthor
No copy

No it's not, somehow they withdrew the story so I reposted it after making some minor changes. It was originally posted a few months back.

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
another installment

hey, any chance of another chapter? or any idea when? thanks

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
Fantastic

Excellent writing, great characters and gradual development.

tomtuckertomtuckerabout 11 years ago
Good stuff

Liked this story a lot. Hope to see more soon.

imgettingoldimgettingoldalmost 11 years ago
Really Good!!

I'm waiting for the next chapter.

Many thanks!!!

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
wow

I hope he exploits her more and gets her pregnant, like the selfish bitch deserves

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
yummy

Yucky old men sucking my tits hard and fingering my slit are a fetish of mine.. this story had me wet and hot the whole time... More please..

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
awesome

Realky hoping for this to continue. I hope he makes her his slave and shares her out a bit to teach her a lesson.

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
Please, please! A continuation.

This story is screaming for a continuation. More non consent, more blackmail and coercion, more reluctance and first timers. Please, please! A sequel!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
more

Pls continue, can you ad titty fucking more than once on her back and through out the house

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
badass !!

dude plzz keep writing this story by far is my fav .. ill pay you to to do anther

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 10 years ago
WOW

Please continue.

KalaLundKalaLundalmost 10 years ago
Freakin hot!!!

Hey man, more more more more more!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 10 years ago

Please write some more

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Mmmmmm

Please write more I'm so horny I need a older man to treat me like this !!

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Trash

Seriously? Either an old man wrote this or an 18 yr old girl. The conversation is cheesy as hell. I've seen 12yr olds write better. Please stop writing or take a writing course!

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Continuation?

Would be appreciated.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 9 years ago
Story is way hot!!!

We need a part 2 !!!!!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 9 years ago
Sooo wet

I wish an older man would fuck my 16 yr old pussy like that

AnonymousAnonymousabout 9 years ago
reply

Are you also that hot? ;)

AnonymousAnonymousabout 9 years ago
sequel titty fuck

Titty fuck her in the sequel. Been to long

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago

Will there be a sequel to this?

And ''sooo wet'' the chances of you being 16 are slim. You are probably an old, overweight man.

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
Great read

I really liked this story and would love to see a sequel. I want something to happen in order for her to have to be fucked by him again, and this time the mailman will join in. They both can have their way with her at the same time and have her really enjoy it eventually.

FuckherhardFuckherhardabout 8 years ago
Awesome story

Dirty old men are the best hahahah

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 8 years ago
sequel !!!

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AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
Wow

Great story, made me wet😄

AnonymousAnonymousabout 7 years ago

Chapter 2?? Great story!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 7 years ago
One of my favourite story's

One of my all time favourites - possibly only way to have improved it was if he had set up video on his phone while she parked the car & then black-mailed her further. Anyway, it's a great read...

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 7 years ago
Chapter 2?

Great story, please write a 2nd chapter?

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 7 years ago
Great story

One of the best. Maybe Kmaf will return some day with the second part.

Many thanks.

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
4 years later..

Still hoping for a part 2. Maybe one day : )

AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago

Enjoyed the story. Got off to it. :)

While a drunken girl may fall for the "I did it with my car, I'll take the blame" line, any half-assed investigation will show that the damage is on the wrong side of the car, wrong paint scrapes on the car down the block. And just how did he manage to hit the Mercedes in her driveway? Possibly a good story point later as she realizes that fucking him didn't help her situation and ultimately pointless.

While I enjoyed the showing off of "Watch me, a fat disgusting pig, fuck the cutest, sexy girl in town" to the mailman, its a little forced as the continuity errors abound.

Its definitely after 3 AM, at most 4 or 5, and a mailman is delivering the early morning newspaper? Maybe should have been a newspaper delivery boy/guy.

In addition, how many times does this mailman make deliveries in the neighborhood? To catch glimpses of her exiting the shower or sitting on the toilet would have to be at some other time of day, no?

And lastly, shadows on curtains only work in one direction, from the brighter side (in this case, inside the house) to the darker side (outside the house). If there could be shadows from both sides, there would need to be a bright light source on both sides. Each of those light sources would wash out the shadow of the opposite side.

The furniture alignment seems like it would also be a bit odd.

But then I'm thinking way too much into this fap piece. Damn it!

Time to go jerk off to this again.

AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago
interesting story

Hello from Greece! interesting fantasy story! However, nobody cared for sex protection?

AnonymousAnonymousabout 4 years ago
Slutty girl star

Ugh omg I’m 16 I shouldn’t be here but I got turned on from this

AnonymousAnonymousover 3 years ago
Is there a next chapter

He definitely wanted to blow his load in her. He had other intentions. Did he succeed in planting his seed in her womb ?

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 3 years ago

Really good!!!

Thanks!!

Waiting for a next chapter!!!

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

He needs to titty fuck her and give her hickies

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

Fat, bald, stinky old man, with a smelly cock? How is that exciting, for anyone other than his carbon copy?

AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

I loved it. Part 2 please.

SwewxxxSwewxxxover 1 year ago

Reply to this one:

"Fat, bald, stinky old man, with a smelly cock? How is that exciting, for anyone other than his carbon copy?"

Well, if you're into guys really is not a good plot.

But for someone really into the "non consent" stuff I think it's even soft. The writer gave Kim the benefit of starting to enjoy it. I prefer when they don't like at all and just endure what's happening.

When I want something more "soft" I go to the "Loving wives" or "Romance" tabs. I am pretty sure you should do the same.

The "non consent/reluctance stories" should push the girls/women, or whatever you like, boundaries further and forced them to experiment unusual things and, on the side, give the chance for those not so fortunate to experiment the forbiden.

AnonymousAnonymous11 months ago

Not sure why the story had to involve a cat being killed…stopped reading at that point.

NightOwl47NightOwl476 months ago

Love it. Beautiful, snobby, entitled cheerleader gets used by fat, ugly old neighbor. His dreams come true, and she has the additional shame of cumming for the guy.

JairBrasilJairBrasil3 months ago

Very good part 02 please

reelsreels3 months ago

Love it so damn hottf

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