All Comments on 'Tale of Two Teens'

Like “The Notebook “, a perfect love story.

No depth of character and clichéd dialogue. I didn’t get past the first page. This was poorly written.

I was waiting for a story to develop. It never happened. This isn't much for "Romance", maybe "Erotic Couplings", or better yet Literotica creates a new category titled "Fuck Fest".

There’s no real plot here. No character development. Lots of sex, which was fine.

And if Kat was 5’9 and 113 lbs, she’d be a skinny stick with zero muscles, no boobs, and no butt. Not realistic.

A better introduction and more character development would improve this fine story. The characters themselves are interesting, but need to be explored in more depth. The love scenes are wonderfully descriptive, but rather too short. A sequel to this story would help immensely.

A great story about growing love! Somehow I imagine Jake with the beginnings of a sexy man's hairy chest -- maybe a spread of sexy chest hair across the top of his muscular young man's chest, and maybe a light treasure trail! A lovely story!