All Comments on 'Tannah The Whore Pt. 03'

This chapter is gritty and not always pleasant, but it is certainly an exciting one, and holds the reader's attention. The sex scenes are also well done, if too brief at times. The grammar could use improvement in places. For example, consider the following: "Wary of them regardless, Tannah stepped over thick stalks..." The phraseology here is rather awkward. It would be better if it read something like the following "Wary of them, Tannah stepped over thick stalks..." The word "regardless" is redundant here and a little confusing. A comma after the word "stalks" would be helpful. Finally, the word "smirked" is a word that is often misused in modern writing. This word is not a synonym for "smiled". It means to sneer, or at least to give a sneering or cynical sort of smile. It means a leering or sarcastic sort of expression. It is not clear from the story here just what "smirked" is intended to mean at the end of the chapter. (These remarks are intended to be constructive only, and is in no way intended to discourage the writing of yembrose, a fine storyteller.)