All Comments on 'Tanning to Entertain'

Good start to a story, but get a proofreader to check spelling and grammar.

To me it was perfectly written.....and highly arousing.....something this good needs to be continued.

Looking forward to part 2!

The grammar was so bad that the story was hard to read. You MUST scan for obvious typos.

The story has potential. I would re-post it with the errors removed.

She came home from the birth of her daughter and found “evidence” husband had been entertaining other women in his bed.

Why wasn’t husband with his wife at the birth? What evidence?

Even the most idiotic of males would change bed sheets after having sex.

No sense whatsoever.

That would be rather interesting since there is no such word in the English language. There is the word, disdain, however.

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So, you couldn't be bothered to spellcheck the very first sentence. Sorry, whatever disdain you get -- well, distain in your universe -- you deserve.

Interesting story. Do agree that spell check could alleviate some distraction.

I've set my profile to eliminate some of the Anonymous comments. Not so sure that their comments are reliable.

Good work, but not a 5. keep em comin.

Good idea, terrible execution.

What a wonderful start to a story. I can’t wait to continue…..

Loved it