All Comments on 'Teacher's Pet'

You need a new proofreader.

Was that his child??

...at the same time?

On the whole, I enjoyed this -- although I would have liked to have seen more build-up and tension between the narrator & Mrs. Jones before they had sex. It reminded me of a couple of teachers I lusted for in high school. The music references made me smile. Perhaps "Slap and Tickle" should have been playing at the end. :-) I do agree with the previous posters' criticism though, but don't let that deter you from continuing to write. The more you write, the better you'll get. Keep at it!

An okay story shot down by poor writing. The contractions were part of the problem.<p>I also found some howlers:<p><p>"Her 38B breast had dark brown nipples" - One breast with multiple nipples? freak show!<br>"A women I had wanked over" - She is a weeemin! like the drunk in Mrs Winterbourne.<p>Not that bad, but please use an editor.

I could not get past the first "It is for you". Can not you use contractions?