All Comments on 'Telepathic Memoirs Ch. 01'

I think i there might be more frisson with work colleagues thoughts or interacions with people you don't know rather than friends.

good premise though!

I really enjoyed reading this, and I think that you should absolutely continue the story.

I always wondered what it would be like to be a telepathic and what they would go through in a day, I do hope you keep this going

I think that this could be the beginning of an awesome series of chapters. I like getting to understand what Ally is like when she is at this age and what she is experiencing from the thoughts/actions of other people. I do believe, however, that you could take this a bit deeper...I don't know if that is the word I am really looking for...What I mean is that it would be cool to get to know this girl more on a personal level. What makes her tick or what is her own personality like aside from her abilities? What happens if she falls in love with someone, or if they fall in love with her? Basically, I'm just wondering if you are going to keep this more superficial or if you are going to delve into this character's life and build plotlines from things that happen in her life (friends, family, school, work, etc.). I do really enjoy your writing style and the level of description that you offer your readers. I think that is why I look forward to seeing where you go with this, should you choose to take it further. :)

Ps. That may or may not make any sense...it is 1:30 am here and I am fantasizing about tomorrow's coffee...It's sad but true.

of lesbian fantasies. It is difficult to follow which images she sees in the other girl's mind and which are her own (as going down on Rose) - but I tink that is a good description of the confusion a telepathic might feel if awakend by arousal in the middle of the night.

Excellent and intelligent work. I'd like to read more of this!

Excellent theme, well written and hope this is the start of an interesting story about this person and her gift or not depending the readers thoughts, of how life continues forward. More please, but hey.... You knew this any way as you just read my thoughts.

I loved this story. A sparklingly different approach to sexual fantasy, and as the story progresses, the reader is drawn along in a world of fantasy and self-pleasure.

Well-written, five stars!

Wow, great plot idea, and great story so far. I am getting ready to read chapter 2, and hope you write more chapters in this story! Thanks for sharing it with us!

I enjoyed reading this very much, and am just about to read chapter 2. The only thing I believe could be worked on is making sure it’s clear what is happening. Most of the time I didn’t know who was thinking what, and whether or not it was just a fantasy or real.

Wow. Perfect execution of a complex and ingenious concept. I loved the humor weaved in with the emotional overload. Just perfect.

This story is wonderful and delightful, great erotica.

Technically impressive writing.