All Comments on 'Tell Me What You Want Ch. 01'

Bea. Cannot wait to see where this goes. I hope and fear it's every bit as intense as Alena's game. 5 stars, needless to say

Promising. But a very slow start for 8000 words.

Great start

Great beginning please continue.

Lovely, gradual build-up. A bit frustrating as I naturally wanted to read / get to the action, but I like the background being established and character introductions. Feel that we need to hear more dialogue or thoughts from the Wife. Looking forward to the next chapter.

Yes, more please. Buildup and detail is worth it

Terrific. Can't wait for more.

Outstanding, as usual!! I like a strong woman character!! 😉

Hector is one stupid mother fucker to sign the contact without a few more changes to it! First: being no "safe word"! Second: must Pencil in that he too could Initiate Termination Of the contractor! Third: no body Modifications such as tattoos, Piercings, Castration, and Vocal cord Modification, or any other Permanent changes to his body, without his Approval! Forth: "no farming out to Men, or groups". Fifth: No Corporal punishment with anything but her hand! If you don't get these changes walk way from the contact, and her and the marriage if you have to!! Some people's Fantasies about being a slave to your Partner, is way better then real life Experiences are. So without out these understanding in place to protect yourself, your just a one stupid motherfucked. Without them someone could get killed, when Reality sets in!!

Not my thing, but it was well-written.

Interesting. Territory that is painstakingly developed over several chapters in "Alena's Game" is covered here in three pages. I have an observation. While Alena is the one who has a history of passively going along with Quinn's decisions, in this case it's Hector. Is the real role reversal yet to occur?

AWESOME STORY!!! KEEP IT GOING!

Some might like.😒

I am looking forward to the next chapter. You get into the character’s head and share this insight with us. This is a story line that can go in different directions. Good luck with it and don’t keep us waiting too long.

Love it!! Should have kept the bi option in, terribly exciting/humiliating to have your wife watch you suck a cock!!!!

"Alena's Game" is the best novella I've read anywhere. To start this piece, it feels like a glorious trip is just beginning.

I couldn't be more thrilled. This chapter reminds me why this is perhaps the most skilled storyteller of this genre you'll find.

Extremely well written

Amazing as usual! I've mentioned this before after being enthralled by your other works, you NEED to get published! You are a fantastic writer! The plotline, the depth and believability of the characters, the tension, the surprises. Just a complete package. I will be the first to buy your works. On to part 2!

No one in their right mind would ever agree to a contract such as this. This is not a marriage, a loving relationship, it’s just one person using and abusing another. It’s not erotic, it’s simply slavery.