All Comments on 'Ten Day Cruise Ch. 01'

Nice pace, nice finish.

love where this is going. Good character development also for the Moms and Dads

damned hot

Very hot! Loved the set up. However, it seemed to end just as the sex was starting. Hopefully there will be more sex in the second chapter. Maybe in future chapters you can write from the mom or dad's point of view to see how they're handling the nudity issue. Five stars and a favorite point!

straight onto our favourite stories list, looking forward to part 2

SO good! Can't wait for more!!

Great start, waiting for more chapters!

This story is great. I can't wait for chapter 2.

WOW!!! Please continue! 5 Stars.

awesome cant wait for part 2

Fantastic build up. A nice sexy tale so far. Please don't have them swap partners.

Excellent writing. Can't wait for the next chapter.

wonderful

Really great story looking forward to part 2

Oh I haven’t been hooked like this in a long time. Please hurry but absolutely take your time. I will patiently impatiently wait.

Perfectly paced, hinting at so much more. Loved it

I’m sorry, although great, it reads the same as the 68.1k worded Ten Day Cruise from Dark Vision back in 2013. If that was you, I hope you are changing things up to improve upon an already great story and please at least mention you are doing so.

Thank you for omitting 4 letter words, and thank you for this one.

an awesome start - hope they continue to discover the joys of sex together and give each other the ultimate gift!

good pace, nice rhythem and sequence of development between exploring young adults. please don't mash up the shown intimacy by rude pornographic high speed sex detailed intercourse with the three other involved couples.

please keep on exploring side of story and above KISS ---> keep it simple & sexy!!!

I found it to be a very interesting read ! Nice story line . Very creative plan taking Megan and glen along on this cruse . Opening a door to a special bond . I’m looking forward to the next chapter .

Trip is not over, I hope there is more to come. 5 stars

more of this story please

The cruise continues???

The cruise is not over yet. Keep it going. You are on the right path & pace but I feel there are several more ports of entry to be visited & explored. 5☆

Now they have discovered their love to each other, must continue the story.

Can’t wait for the next chapter! So many possibilities- brothers/sisters, friends/friends, parents/kids, parents/parents, twosomes, foursomes, eightsomes? Wish I could read on right now!

Great story! Look very forward to the next chapter!

Nice subtle segue throughout - Clothes optional cruise ship? Give me a break - "changed in the head" at least you got the nautical terminology correct - Come on chapter 2 . . . .

Holy shit!!

What an amazing story!

Most stories on here fall flat, or are riddled with crudity and male dominance, but not this one!

It's a rare thing to be able to call an erotic story heartwarming, but this one achieves it 100%.

When Glen amd megan start touching each other in bed, it's so meaningful and touching!!

You truly did an amazing job with this story.

Full score....5 stars!

Sincerely,

B4PW.

Superbly written. I really enjoyed the slow build up, the relatable nature of each character, and each character's slow growth.

Oh just wait. It gets worse.