by PassionForAll
Well done and oh so real. Pardon the redundancy, very well done and realistic as it gets. Regardless if story is fact or fiction this was one tale that had me truly emphasizing with the female character. Keep writing and sharing please.
A very interesting and intellectual story. dont go by my rating .... it's just that if i am reading this particular section, im looking to JACK OFF for a particular need ... and this is an intellectual story that i would have nejoyed at any other time ... EXCEPT right now and right here .... take care
I couldn't agree more: I really made a mistake in placing this story here; non-erotic would have probably been a better choice.
I interpret this a the subtle beginning moment of your trip to submission. This would be the first chapter on that trip. Right?
Well I have to ask...is that is? I think you would have had a better reception if you had expanded this a little but more thoroughly. You went into more detail about the buffet line and apparel than what was written about the sexual act and the act of control/ humiliation. I see great potential here, you write very well, but this is definitely too short and just needs more. I aslo agree with the rest of the feedback that it is inappropriately placed especially if this is all there is to this story.