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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 5 years ago
Far to Short

Needs much more detail

UltimateHomeBodyUltimateHomeBodyalmost 5 years ago
1st POV is hard to write

At times you stated things as fact when you could never know, only guess.

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Long time tech guy, sometime writer back in the Usenet newsgroup days getting back into the game. Very attached. Fond of good food and drink, outdoor activities, and sarcasm. 11/10/19 "Plum Blossoms: Full Bloom Pt. 01" went live today. It's the first part of the novel ...