All Comments on 'That Old House'

Wow you blab on and on about work and nonsense but when you get to the meat we get half page. We all knew the tragedy that would happen. You could have left out a lot of stuff and put in a good fights over several weeks or whatever. Now he has a woman that don’t sound like she will stay in the long run. Should have brought up Mary way earlier. Great story until about page 8-10. This is when he should have brought up Mary. The end didn’t gratify waiting for reveal. Sorry

Thank you for the great story. . A lot people here want to just jack off and not really have, visualize, or take part of any story that is not exclusively erotic. More foreshadowing would be delightful, thank you!

A riveting tale !

Thank you for sharing ,

First rate

Absolutely incredible.

This was a great story!!

What a wonderful story. Such well-crafted characters. Just a touch of the supernatural. And well integrated to the story. Wow wow wow.

Great story Thank you.

What did ya say

"This is my first foray into Erotic Horror. Although there are horror/evil elements, in the end it's a romance, with a heavy paranormal theme. I wasn't sure if this went in Erotic Horror, Non-human, or Romance. Let me know if I got it wrong."

Right your first story in 'Erotic-Horror' is

#1 in erotic horror hall of fame

And I'd say you deserve it

Although the readers(including me) are most likely perverts

This story is mind blowing

the ending was a little hard to stomach

Great story, could not stop, read all 15 chapters straight thru!

Absolutely fantastic. Read it all in one go, I couldn’t put it down. By page 13 I started to read slower as I couldn’t bear for it to end. Just about to read everything else you’ve written. Thank you so much for sharing this piece of literary magnificence with us all.

Great for 12 pages or so.

Ending was rushed.

Beautiful and touching story.

Agree with some other commenters. Utterly amazing plot concept, but felt rushed at the end with the other ghosts

Amazing story loved every part of an emotional sap during most of it could stop reading it. Just wished it was longer so I could continue reading it😊

Great story, and really great writing. It was hard to gloss over as your writing style made it very easy to want to read every word. My only criticism, the ending feels rushed, but all in all an excellent offering!

Brilliantly written,great emotional content,believable and well rounded characters who truly engaged my sympathy. As an added bonus the steamier side of things didn't feel contrived which can often be the case with takes like this. In a way I do agree with the slightly rushed feel towards the end, in fact I felt this story could very well stand up to becoming a series. I'd love to read about their life leading on from Bev's sacrifice. Will definitely be checking out the rest of your work!

Hi I know I’m just one in a sea of commenters but can I say I love how this story is both erotic and beautiful. Please do something like this about lonely vampire sisters in a castle with a tragic backstory. Or even continuing this world I’d love it. I just happen to love vampires. You know what this story reminds me of? The Graveyard Book. One of if not my favourite novel and another beautiful haunting story about ghosts.

Great story!!! Even got a little misty eyed.

Who were the bad guys? You never said. And, how exactly did Bev die?

I love the story.

If I had any complaints it was that I a would have wanted more of the main story (after the fight) before jumping to the epilogue (for example see how Karen reacted to the news that were ghosts and that he was “seeing” Mary).

However, that’s minor compared to the rest of the story.

I stop by and read this now and again. I am always finding little snippets that I missed

For my money there is not another tale out to top this

great story up until the last page -the ending was rushed and left too many questions unanswered.

By the middle of it, I stoped playing with myself and read. It was an amazing tale. Congrats. And thank you.

Loverd this story, overall. Fleshing out he bad poltergeist, (so to speak), and Karen's reaction would be the masterstroke to make this a best seller - hell maybe tweak it to make her an active partner giving energy as well, instead of having her left out. After all, she's already enjoyed it several times, & sure she would have just as great a relationship with Mary! It'd make more sense they'd be a supernatural poly & make for a happier ending. 😊

You should definitely see about publishing this in general, too! Then watch the royalties roll in!

This was just delightful. I wish the end had been fleshed out a little more as it seemed very abrupt but overall it was just fantastic.

Did Bev make Jake her primary heir? What happened to the rest of the stuff in the hidden hearth where the jewelry was found?

Lots of unanswered questions but I really enjoyed this whole tale.

All I can say is AWESOME!!!

This is gold thought i was reading a web novel if you can expand the story more and make a short novel with It id be first in line to buy it.

This needs so many more chapters... 5stars

I absolutely freaking loved this❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️.. I was most happy to read that Jack Karen and Bev made a home again out of that house, that Mary was accepted and loved and that the evil that cost her n her little girl their lives was finally vanquished by Mary herself ,very very fitting .. that Bev, on her passing stayed to keep the family safe and that the house was finally complete... I couldn't start cooking my Sunday lunch without completing those last three chapters... Looking forward to more like this...

I have read hundreds of stories on this site and this by far is the best I have read. Thanks so much for the escape from reality for a while.

You write wonderfully.

As good a story as I've read on here.

Well done.

That Old House is definitely one of the very best stories I've had the pleasure of reading. Truly, a fun read! I loved it!

only thru page 10 but had to jot down my thought quickly. Beware and stay out of the attic on the anniversary of the fire, or the entire hose or have a large fire extinguisher handy.

This is the one of the best story i have read so far... Thanks for this work

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Great for multiple rereads!

You have just enough 'build-up/background' to be entertaining and not overwhelming even at 13 pages.

11/10!!!!!

Beautiful. Bit long though, skimmed a couple of pages.

Great story - could even have had a longer ending without any problems.

This is so much more than a five-star story...SSSOOO MUCH MORE!!! You deserve Some kind of recognition for writing this, because...because...because...

You made me 😢 CRY!!! AND, CRY HARD!! I react to stories like this, because of the emotion generated by the words, and by the investment of the writer in the story.

Obviously, maybe, you have experienced at least *something* like this, at some level. I most appreciate that the sexual aspects were dealt with so maturely (maybe Karen would not agree!!??) At the start, I knew Mary was the one taking care of him...opening/closing doors, moving things, pleasuring him at odd times...And, it was so enjoyable to move on to where MC realizes what is happening.

Plus, when Bev gets caught in her conversation with Mary, he figures out she knows; really, the anger response was QUITE unwarranted...should have felt more relief, and a sense of gratitude that they could converse and help each other with the house, the malevolence...

I ESPECIALLY like how Bev is still present, with Mary...and active!!

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Excellent, thank you 😊

Only my second 5 ⭐ rating. Well deserved. Someday, a sequel or even a prequel would be fantastic. Thanks for this story in any event.

This is a great read love it and the ending was amazing

Please continue this one day following the kids! Or please make a story with an albino girl, models like Nastya Zhidkova got me interested but the character of Nienke "Iana" Meijer and her thick ass got me really into it. Too little eroticas have sexy albino girls.

Two things. First I absolutely loved the story, the setting, the characters, and the plot. It seemed as though you rushed the last half a page or so starting when you fast forward to the family and kids etc. In spite of this, your story definitely deserves a much wider audience than this site can offer. Which brings me to my second point. You need to publish this in a print form and get busy writing writing prequels that center around each time the house burns down and why.

I cannot express to you enough how well you wrote the ending (including the epilogue). I was on the edge of my seat feeling all of the emotions! I think this story was the perfect length and you wrote very neatly (there were few, if any, needless words).. this story was epic. Have a lovely day!

Read it all in a couple of hours. Enjoyed it very much . Thank You

Just fuckin' awesome!

Another great tail nice twist at the end ...3 hours :)

2nd reading and just a "Masterpiece" of a story.

That ending was a great twist. What a fabulous imagination you have.

Love it!

WOW. Just WOW.

Top notch. This is a beautiful story. I don't have adequate words to express how much I love it.

I was so into this story I read it again the same day! Well done!

Just wonderful. A real delight

Good job, thanks for sharing your work! I loved that you submitted this as 1 story/post, instead of 4 stories with 4 pages ea. I loved this story ❤.

Great story TTT, and a great ending too! Thanks :)

One of my absolute favorite stories! Well done.

Great story from an equally great storyteller. 👍 I love it

It’s now my 4th time reading this story. Still one of the best on Lit, but wish you had stretched out the end a bit more. Seems rushed. 5-stars.

Just an excellent story/

This should become a movie...

Look, I love this story, but as I tell my mate who reckons he's seen multiple ghosts and poltergeist, why does it not shock your world view. If I had seen something that science could not explain I would spend my life trying to find answers, not merrily continue on like it never really happened.

Lapsed catholic, non believing protestant and the only properly religious living person is now dead and a ghost.

I do not agree with religion, but accept peoples faith, but as a non believer if I experienced the super natural this would scare the living crap outta me. Oh, random malcontent poltergeist can kill me and there's nothing I can do about it, I'm noping the fuck away.

Really gotta feel for Karen as well, 2 people living in your house that everyone else in your family except you can see, talk to and experience, and one of them sucks off your husband on the reg and keeps putting her photo in your bedroom. Shiiiiiite.

I enjoyed the story a lot, but the climax felt a little sudden and anticlimactic. Great work overall.

An amazing and powerfully-written story in any setting but even more so in an erotic one. You are a good writer.

I confess I was and still am a bit confused at the bewildering ending, which seems to suddenly leap forward too fast after the much more measured and structured pace of the bulk of the narrative. No explanation of any sort is given of 'the malevolence' or of the other members of the original family, which is disappointing, even if it does supply the element of mystery. This part could perhaps be rewritten a little?

My gosh. What a classic tale of good over evil and the Supreme sacrifice it took to saved loved ones.

Nicer writings than just cheating and BTB.

Thank you for a memorable chilling romance.

Not as poetic but gothically in spirit with Edgar Allan Poe.

Took me a while to finish the story, so, what happened to the fire? Bev kicked their ass...all good however; why were they so mad at the world why didn't they leave?

Loved it

Maybe a sequel, explaining the original haunting...like one of the soldiers who died, a love unrequited or something?

Reread this and my God I wish I could give you another 5 star rating. Simply awesome

Outstanding. Love to read more about this family.

Outstanding in every aspect of an absorbing tale. Could have read more if more was available especially with explainations as to

developing new family...5 stars..JZK

knowing this as a long story already as good tale takes time to unfold,a sequel would be a bonus if it is written in context and as well as the story already told written.Not just for the sake of a sequence..

A truly Gothic horror story. What a vivid classic film it would make? More positive than 'Fall of the House of Usher' and 'Annabelle Lee'...

Extraordinary fabulous performance with your pen ….. this tale has bestseller status and the idea characters scenery just name it made this tale a ten star one 🙏

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Was a very nice story I enjoyed all parts of it , 5 stars , it kept me glued to it page by page , Very Well Done

Really enjoyed this ghost story. Nice ending. Kept me reading until the end.

Amazing! Just when I think you can't get better, I read another one that is. This one is great. When I get over the emotions of this first time, I will re-read and enjoy again.

Best story I've ever read in here ⭐🌟✨🌟⭐

The ending was confusing to me. Maybe because I am easily confused. Regardless, GREAT story. Since 5 is the limit, 5⭐.

Awesome story. What category? Is it supernatural or romance? I think it is both with emphasis on romance. TTT, you are one helluva writer. One of the best. It was a strange story but very enjoyable. Only the ending was not very clear. Who were those malevolent entities? How were they there? How were they kicked out? Well, all's well that ends well, I guess. In life Bev might have lasted a few more years. But now she can stay with them for as long as she wants. Ditto for Mary. ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

I enjoyed this as a more romantic novella as the romantic parts were not that overtly graphic but a very good, well woven story.