by le9endary405
Makes no sense.
She's a confident person in a loving relationship and she falls completely under the spell of a person who doesn't even try to seduce her?
Also, is English your first language?
"I am teacher" - I am A teacher. Especially you claim to be an English teacher!
Minor quibble: "I don't give a fuck what people think or talk about me." Better is "or SAY about me"
Several other odd usages that disturb the flow of the story, and you repeatedly say "imaged" for "imagined".
That escalated quite quickly. I would say better transitioning is needed as well as an editor.
I like the story and the angle with her trying to make her friend bi or open her mind to a lesbian relationship , but it needs more character development , and story wise , I would personally like to see that her friend was bi the whole time trying to claim her completely so hope to see more , can't wait to see where you go with it
I like the way it's going, I find it exciting and as a woman, I would love to hear more. So please continue it farther.
This story has almost infinite possibilities!!! TPlease take the sluttiest route!
Not very good. The changes were too abrupt and a bit nonsensical. Kind of flat emotionally.