All Comments on 'That's the Breaks Ch. 02'

Well, I waited for this second installment, and I guess nothing short of Kryptonite will slow our hero down. I DO think that the cum count is getting a little excessive, though. I still really like the idea of the story, but you have taken it to an illogical excess that is sorely straining my powers to continue without laughing. Poor Rick doesn't have to be "cumming in huge blasts" on the hour, every hour to make this a good story. Bring it back into the realm of possibility (two or three times a day) please.

That was so HOT!!! I was hoping you would keep going with this family. Ther are so hot together.

I agree with a previous comment about the number of times a guy can cum. Also the number of 'Ropes' of cum that he could shoot after a short period of time since the last one. I understand that this is fiction and fantasy, but it helps to keep things just a little more reasonable. I Liked your style of writing and the flow of the story. I also liked NOT seeing stupid errors like names getting switched because the author got lost or failed to proof read their own work. Last of all, KEEP WRITING!

I loved the story, it had a great build up and kept the sexual tension going. Don't pay any attention to the people who critizice the number of ropes or whatever else they feel they can nitpick about. Don't change how you write, I can't wait for more of your work.

i really i mean REALLY enjoy your stories.keep up the good work and cant wait to read more of what you write....and to the rest that nikpic about the ropes if i understand it he did say it was a story and not a TRUE story...i mean damn get a life and find other things to worry about....

when is the next story in the group

i was woundering if mom and sis get pregnat

there is no more story in the group from what i can tell anonymous... thats why he put "The end."

I hope you add to this story one day, it's just as good as all of your others. Please keep on writing. Thank You!! for your time and incredible effort you put into your stories.

This story reminds me more of your earlier writing, which I liked a lot. You probably have finished this but some lesbian action with the women would add a new twist for a third chapter.

don't he have some female cousins or something and it would of been hoot to have an additional chapter when they all get prego

I truely hope that this story doesn't end here because it is worthy of at least one more chapter maybe two. I like the way your mind works and I hope to see more of the further adventures of Rick and his family. Maybe after Rick gets better, his girlfriend comes back and joins the fun or maybe his sister bring some friends over for some fun or maybe somebody get pregnant, who knows (Hehe!). Hope to read more of your great writings!

DONT STEP ON THE BRAKES, USE THE THROTTLE. TK U MLJ LV NV

Five star piece. Most enjoyable.

Really enjoyed it so that answered any misgivings bout Rick's staying power or what he's able to do with both arms in casts, lol . I have read and enjoyed quite a few of your stories. Keep up the good work!!! ;o))

For adoption to a family with a GILF, MILF & SILF?

Hahahah i enjoyed it

-waterboy

Actually it was damn good, great story

Just another great and entertaining story from you, dezurtdawg. Enjoyable as always, keep up the good work!!!

Seriously dude, I loved the shit out of this one.. And the fact that my name is Rick really helped, hehehe.

5/5!

So i want to give you a 8/5 but the site won't let me lol. This is by far 1 of the best stories i have read of yours yet.

I have to say for all the nitpickers and nonbelievers out there; that this story isn't as far fetched as they made it out to be. I remember when I was 19 I was in a situation where we could fuck all day for a while, and my GF got curious and without telling me counted one day and told me I had come 20 times that day. Now, I'm down to a fraction of that these days; but it is certainly within the realm of possibility for a nineteen year old. I certainly didn't have his volume - I think the most I ever had at one time was about a quarter of a cup after a long abstinence, so I can't say I ever produced great ropes of cum that many times a day. But I'm sure there are people who do; everyone is different. Otherwise, I would have to say that this story is a great fantasy and I would love to see it continue. I think they should all get "married" and move in together and fuck all day long for the rest of their lives. I think it would be obviously good if the mother and sister used birth control, but maybe they somehow bring another woman into it who can get pregnant with babies that they can all help raise together. He shouldn't work with three women obsessing over his body, but should at least get out and get some exercise and get a life outside the house. I don't know about bringing too many other women in, because I don't know how he will handle the ones he has already. But maybe they can form some form of nudist colony/sex cult that might grow. At the very least, it would be good if they taught some of the clueless young men how to eat pussy. I think all young women should take an oath to train all of their sex partners to first learn to eat their pussies before they can fuck, every time. That way they spread the practice, and hopefully men will learn that to get women they have to get with it. I now love to eat pussy better than any other sexual act (hence my pseudonym) and I highly recommend it to everyone. And all women I have sex with from time to time really appreciate it. I don't mind licking a woman who has a hard time reaching orgasm, and after she has been with me a few times this never seems to remain a problem. Just saying, guys.

Listen to the nit-pickers, the better you improve your writing the more enjoyable the stories will turn out. Yeah,no way the human body can produce that much cum in a single day. The dude would have been shooting blanks. And that other poster that said 20 times?! I was young once too, but after so many times it becomes physically painful to get an erection. (Sadly!)

...lemme nitpick about the screaming during sex; OH MY GOOODDDDDDD, IMMM CUMMMMMMMIIIINNNGGGGGGG,!! Dude, stretch out the vowels, thats fine, but if your going to stretch the consonants then say it out loud to make sure its actually doable and doesnt sound stupid, heh. I know its pissy, but its irritating to read since we're sounding the stuff out in our heads.

The G spot. It's really irritating reading that some guy is hitting a chicks G spot with his dick. To even do that if hes laying on his back she has to lean way the fuck back trying to get his dick pointing out of her belly from the inside and then his dick is just rubbing the outside bottom of her pussy raw. He certainly wasnt hitting her clit on downstrokes while trying to do that. Better realism will just to stick to using fingers on the G spot. (Not that most guys on here have ever bothered.)

The chapter was pretty much over the top, though I still enjoyed it. The sister had me going :)

Ok, sure I think that we're definitely talking over the top, both for his ability to do and their capacity to take, as well as the idea that he ONLY ends up with broken arms after getting beat with multiple baseball bats and that after getting treated for compound fractures that he would be out of the hospital anytime soon or not SERIOUSLY doped up for a week or more as a result... but it's a freaking story so who really cares if it's 100% believable... the idea of them all willing to put out for him so easily PRIOR to him giving them a physical reason... a very sex-oriented family. -though odd the mom and grandma would on the one hand be like that and on the other have gone as long as they each professed to have gone without sex...

But welll written and that's the true point...

You took a very familiar story and pushed it clumsily over the top. Way over the top beyond the point of being entertaining. I mean it stopped being funny after the third sex scene was described with the same tired Lit-porn phrases, endless ropes of cum and his massive granite slab?? Try reading this stuff to yourself out loud before submitting them.

It's a pretty good formula, which is why so many others have used it but, it needs to stay grounded in at least a bit of reality. Exaggerating a hero's endowment seems to be standard but you went crazy on the guys stamina and fluid capacity too. That's just distracting. It doesn't make it a hotter read. Quite the opposite.

Even though the orgy ending was no surprise by now as you seem to end many of your stories in a family orgy, it's still a lazy writing habit. Based on the number of items you've submitted, you seem to like writing so try to be a better writer instead of just hacking out the same sad porn template for the reward of false praise. Your choice.

This is one of your better written stories. Not, I say, one of your better stories but better written. I love the story progression. After a few beers he defends his sister(would he have done that sober?)and gets beaten badly as result. Hospital sends him home after a couple of days with multiple breaks in both arms and severe bruising over most of his body. His sister (who professes to hate him, before the party) quickly masturbates him. Grandma blows him, sister fucks him, mom fucks him, they have an all family orgy. The End. Everything happens rather quickly. The Hospital spits him out speedily and then his female relatives almost immediately and with total abandon begin to service him sexually. But I guess it has to happen pretty fast in a short story. Besides its your fantasy, after all. His dick is humongous and all three can deep throat him and all love the taste of his cum. These three things all in conjunction are a little less than believable. However you managed to not get to the middle or end and 'self-destruct' as I read in another comment. It is a tendancy you have that you managed to avoid here and stuck with the story. Jolly Good!

Thanks for the comment!

In response to some of your points or questions:

1. Yes, he had a few beers but he had barely gotten there and chugged the brew, so he was not yet "drunk". Therefore, he DID defend his sister when sober.

2 Have you not noticed how quickly hospitals spit out patients back to their homes? Have a baby and see how long you have the room. So once the casts were on and they had determined he had no brain damage or internal organ problems, he would go home, with help of course.

3. Just because younger sibling likes to tag along with older sibling, does not mean the older hates the younger, just that the older one hates the tag along shadow aspect. Not to mention a fear that the parental units might hear about what the older one does.

4. Sis did not "quickly" masturbate her brother. She had been having a difficult time most of the day handling his prominent member that was always hard. It wasn't until late that first day that she finally masturbated him realizing he was unable to do so himself.

5. You state, "Grandma blows him, sister fucks him, mom fucks him, they have an all family orgy. The End." Not exactly correct as to order and many other things happen that you conveniently omit. Main thing is, if you want to read an epic story, (mine is nearly 21,000 words in total for both parts) or just prefer a lllloooonnnngggg one, then read "It" by Stephan King, or try out "Six Times a Day" by 'spacer x'. (Not all chapters posted here.) What should I have written, from Rick's point of view, when much of the day he is asleep due to the pain meds?

In the end you do seem to like it so I'm happy about that. I just had to respond to what you didn't seem to like. Glad to know I didn't "self-destruct" in this story. I refer again to "It", as that story's ending SUCKED! A fucking spider after a thousand plus pages! Shit!

Thanks again for reading AND commenting on my story.

dezurtdawg

would like for this to continue with sister mother and grandmother get involved with each other

I do hope so, this is one hot story...........

Will there be more? If ever? Thank you for this story. I'd like more of this story.

Would love to see what happens after the casts come off!!

I read it nearly every time I come across it. I am an old man and have read a jillion stories, I just enjoy reading and don't worry about little things that seem to bother some readers. Life is short, don't be so hard on others. They are just trying to make it and their criticism button is always set on "HIGH" like my Mother's was. (She would be chagrined to be mentioned in the porn section, may she R.I.P.) So, just enjoy the author's efforts and don't always be looking to criticize. I think Dez writes some of the best mother/son interactions throughout his many stories.

love your stories and this is a great one would you ever consider writing another chapter

You need to follow-up and see how things Go after the cast's are removed. And does Rick get a Girlfriend and does she accept his Family way's. Maybe Dad could come back looking to Reconcile and Hear his wife screaming her Orgasm and Know he can't compete.

There has to be a follow up story on this one once the casts come off. Maybe he can take turns sleeping with them at night. Loved the story

Ron/ cowboyridecc@yahoo.com

The story was decent and I enjoyed for the most part reading both chapters, but the one thing I just couldn't get into in the least was the inclusion of "grandma", talk about a turn off lol. Nothing screams erotic like "ride me grandma!" (sarcasm btw). You would've been better off including either an aunt or cousin if you wanted another female relation just saying, other than that keep up the good writing.

so what happens next? when the casts come off will he and Jazy move in together or will they all live happily ever after as an incestuous family with a baby or two from Jazy? Love to read more please.

Just ignore the critics, surely they can get it in their heads that this is a fantasy. geeez.

I love every story of yours I have read so far, this one has to be at the top of the list for sure. I hope you add back to this one sometime. Maybe all 3 ladies could show up pregnant at the same time. All them milk filled titties for him to keep up with and help drain would be awesome. Great job, I look forward to reading more of your work!

You can't stop there, this story is far from over. Get your arse into gear and give us another chapter or two . ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

I agree w/Kk8. More!!!😁😁😁

Humour, entertainment, and a bit if family fun.

Thanks

love this story even though it is 7 years old to bad there is not a third part

hot hot hot

I would like you to keep this story going please. At least a 3rd part after the son is healed. How do the 4 of them make things work?

dezurtdawg here!

Hi guys n gals, just a quick note to let all of you know a few things.

First of all, I AM NOT DEAD........YET!

Besides my writer's block, my ticker started acting up a few years back and after way too many trips to the doctor they figured it out and prescribed meds to help with it. (My arteries are clean, just a non-correctable low expulsion factor. IF you know what that means you have my sympathy.) So I bounced from good days to bad days and the doctor helped to exacerbate that problem with constant changes to my meds. Shit!

Finally had a pacemaker implanted and, that, along with different meds seems to have stabilized things for me. So I've been slowly working on my long dormant stories. Unfortunately, while all of this went on I have forgotten my password to get onto my author's page to upload new stories that I have ready. Every time I ask for the reset password code it turns out that it won't work and thus far the help people here have been NO HELP!

So anyway, wish me luck at getting that fixed. I will try to add this note to all of my stories, or at least the last part for those that are series. Take care, all of you, and don't forget to vote!

dezurtdawg

So pleased to read your post! Sorry to hear of your medical challenges and best wishes for smooth sailing from now on.

But that's OK. It would have been better if he knocked up mom and Sister!

Fun story to read

great story

great story PLEASE write more

Shpuld be more chapters to this one

Fantastic hot sexy story. Love to read what happens when the casts come off and he still has his family harem. What sexual heaven for Rick. Please write some more.

That was indeed hot. 5

Bloody hell, what a crying shame you didn’t continue on with this amazing story. There’s so much more to this story.. still I gave you ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Oh hell no...please keep em cumming

If they aren't bred it doesn't count

I love the way you tell your stories, and how and why they develop. Great job, and thank you. Keep telling stories like this.

Excellent story. Flows well, couldn't stop reading until it ended.

Incredible indeed. Just....WOW!!! I would LOVE to see more chapters of this when he has healed and his casts and braces are removed. Maybe a 4 way with them all at once. WOW!!! Thank you for a fantastic story indeed. Loved it.

'Wildbill

I liked it but Imho at least another page was needed to tell the family orgy.

I'm surprised your CAPS LOCK key has not broken by now. BUT GOSH IT SURE IS EXCITING.

Great! NO cuckholding just plain inter generational fun.

Loved it ❤️🌟😍♥️ Full 5 🌟 .

Bill S.

You are such a romantic, I'm sure that any woman in your life is very happy with you. If your behavior is anything like your characters a woman would be elated to be with you. This just makes your stories that much more enjoyable. There are too many stories here that portrait men being selfish and non caring. It's ok for a quick fantasy tale but great writing encompasses true feeling and heart. Great work, I wish only the best for you. Thanks again for writing it's much appreciated 😊👍

Helluva trifecta, dawg, sister , mom and grandma? Sweet. A lot of fucking, seemingly short recoup time and back to it, without draining the tank? Fantasy all over, sure, but there are limitations. Stil… 5*

Wonderful funny sexy story!!!!!!

Smokin’ hot!!

Gawd. . .What a way with words. Can hardly wait to see what happens when he gets the casts. A 4-way? . . . .

Chapter 3? Loving it!!

Need chapter 3

Needs to not be the end needs more chapters for Shure.

this is the best i have ever read and i have even written some so congrats wanna collab