by PayDay
I don't know how I missed it but this was just great. PTS is a bitch. And if you can save some one who has it - worth the effort. But the pain lasts a LONG time. The sequels are never as good as the first meeting - until much later. If you save one life it is as if you had saved the whole world. Do it.
I liked the plot and the general writing style is ok but from the point where the hero turned up at his new home, the whole thing went far too fast and easy.
"loved the story, a five, a bit of editing would help
such things as new for knew but it didnt hurt the story"
Done deal, I'm all for asking nicely. Should be up in a couple of days.
such things as new for knew but it didnt hurt the story
Just... this story touched me more than almost any other story on this site.
I agree with PayDay. That a story is good doesn't mean it would improve with additional chapters. This one could take additional chapters without weakening, but is about as good as it's going to be without them.
As to the "more" comment, sorry, I'm a big fan of open endings and letting the imagination do the rest. I find it's the key to Brain Sex.
"always leave them wanting more"
An excellent story! Felt like I was actually there. Hope this has more to it. Thanks.
and still carry on a conversion. TK U MLJ LV NV