All Comments on 'The Accidental Text'

fantastic very hot easy wanking material

I am new to this story. I'm not usually a fan of incest stories, but I enjoyed this one. While I agree that it started a little quick, I found the mom to be rather believable.

this goy me off, great story

you are so tight, mom!! thats not something you hear everyday,,,lolol,, a little over the top for my taste,, more is not more (the anal fuck) its just piling on..had the story been longer to spread out the eroticism i would have enjoyed it more,,,,stil a hot premise just the same.

my hand is up if you need a new sister ... great story ...and beautiful

Loved it. Pacy. Hot. I had 'an appropriate reaction'.

Damn it i want to be your sister .. his aunt..

I agree about the anal lube. I always require ,,,or need it and lots of it when giving anal. Having said that I really enjoyed it and hope to find a follow up. I had no bother awarding it 5 stars.. Thanks

Awesome story! Love the nuances and interplay of characters and sensations. Ohh yeah, good sexy loving too! 10/ 10!

Great story! I love how mom just loses control and can't seem to help herself.

Enjoyed the adventure of Luke and Lucy...from either perspective...the process (writing) kept me engaged and more...

I thought it was extremely HOT and I'd love to play the son when the movie is made. 'Tho I'm not as well endowedI'd love to get two fit MILF sisters in bed.

Please write more.

I think my wife would do the same if the opportunity arose.

Ms. Sixtynine, your story was arousing. It was a very good read. I liked both Lucy and Luke's POV intermingling. I'm not an English teacher so no more comments on grammar, butbyour grade is 5 stars. Thanks for the pleasurable few minutes. I guess I will remain anon. because I've never logged in to this site. HLA, rural PA

Phenomenal story. Written well and believable. Thank you very much.

Point of view errors.

Ok, I stumbled across this story, following the links you posted in your forum signature. And given the time since you wrote this who knows if you're even on this site or reading comments any longer. But I decided to post a comment anyway, in case you do see it. The tale is fairly well written, you have a decent vocabulary and don't make the simple grammatical and spelling errors that make a lot of amateur fiction look so childish. And I see that others have pointed out the ever-changing Aunt's name. Incest isn't my kink, but I'm not here to kink shame so you do you.

But you need to work on your point of views. It is jarring to see Lucy (the primary POV character) make statements like this:

"I didn't notice Luke eating cereal at the kitchen table but he definitely noticed me. As I stretched to reach for a breakfast bar from the top shelf, my son's eyes locked onto my ass. I was wearing my favorite pair of sky blue yoga pants and a white, sleeveless top that fit me like a glove. He was admiring my muscular bottom."

This isn't the only example of this, but it should illustrate the issue well enough that I don't need to include any of the others. When you use the omniscient narrator it is fine to have them describe what others are thinking. But Lucy isn't some demigoddess with magical mind reading abilities. So how is it that she knows what her son is thinking? How does she know what he is looking at when he is behind her and she hasn't noticed he is even in the room?

The above quoted section would have read much better if written like this:

"Lucy didn't notice Luke eating cereal at the kitchen table but he definitely noticed her. As she stretched to reach for a breakfast bar from the top shelf, her son's eyes locked onto her ass. Lucy was wearing her favorite pair of sky blue yoga pants and a white, sleeveless top that fit her like a glove. Luke was admiring her muscular bottom."

Alternatively, you could have written that paragraph and the other like it from Luke's point of view. Either would have been a better choice that making Lucy appear to both know and not know what Luke is thinking and doing.

Best of luck to you!

Oberon

looking forward to part two.

I loved your story.... I'll be reading more..😏

So wher is the story with hot Aunt Laura?

Perfect length - 2 pages!

I came twice, reading it twice. I have an adult son who is not as well-endowed as the boy in your story and I've never thought of him that way... well, until now. ;)

aunt cums over?

But way too fast.

I get that she is lonely.

I get that he is hung.

I get that they are the answer to each other's prayers.

But she could have and should have stopped at oral for the first time. Then the self doubt kicks in and she has to convince herself to go further. After he gets her pussy, then the aunt gets involved. It then becomes a competition between them. Mommy wins by eating his cum from her sister. THEN he gets her ass, and the sister, if she ever wants his dick again, has to clean up both of them. She goes ATM with him, and gets her ass plowed while eating her sisters ass.

If I could write, I would. I'm just an idea man. LMAO.

Really fantastic story, everything right with it. Obviously I’d like to see another chapter with how you left off. Keep on writing, you have a talent.

That was an awesome story that was very well written and very believable that it could happen to someone. I have to give you an A+ very well thought out story.

Beautiful story. Exotic and well written. Would love to see another chapter.

Keep writing! It would be a good idea to get an editor to really make your stories "pop." Loved the premise. 5/5.

Do you even know what a camel toe is? It’s NOT a woman’s pussy. It’s the cleft made by a tight pair of jeans or other clothing. A woman doesn’t have a “camel toe” If she’s naked. You ruined a pretty good story by repeatedly calling it that.

very very good gotta go

Re: Lana/Lara: There was also "me pussy" instead of My, but maybe she was English? ha. I also had that problem recently with reading, editing, waiting, and still screwed up more than ever before, but as promised, Part 2 was much better. Yes, a can, a 9" cock in her pussy and ass was a little hard to take. I would prefer working up slower. Looking for Mom, Lana, her daughter Lara, and son, or whatever. Keep it up! (5 stars anyway) :-)

Yet I find my hand inside my panties.....

Loved it. Very hot. Now, you TOTALLY need to add another chapter, the story of the aforementioned threesome. Definitely needs to happen

I can only wish that was me fucking my mother in this hot story... better yet, a threesome with his Aunt.

I really like this story.

Had me really hard

You should add second chapter with three some with his mom and aunt

Absolutely one of the best stories ever. Can't wait to see what happens when his Aunt cum over.

Damn good !! Can't wait for my wife to read this while I play with her. Bring on the Aunt.

mello you need to bring this story back with the aunt as much the aunt wants to fuck her nephew

Bring on Aunt Lara.It is time for the threesom.

Just read this again and for 3 out of 4 times.

I managed to shoot my load in my mouth and some on my face.and swallow all I could.

Thanks.

...this is hot! 5 Stars!

What a story. An incredible buildup, and a climaxing ending.

I don't know if anything like this has ever happened before but I want it to happen to me now - too bad I'm way past the puberty curve.

I'm going to read your other stories hoping they will get me off like this one.

Thanks!

Gives new meaning to "butt texting".

5 Stars

Hot Anal Mom/Son action. Hope you write a sequel to this. We loved reading it with my nephews cock up My ass. Fuuuck so nice with it buried in me, Filled my Butt when Luke unloaded in his Moms ass. Would love to see Aunt Linda get the same done to her. We always like a Hot Steamy story when we fuck. Incest is Best!!!!

want see when get a hot cock up her ass from him

Perfect. Need more seduction

Please continue this story, it has lots of potential.

Ramjet

OMG that was soon hot - I love it - watch out if I have a boy when I marry

keep going with the story.

need alot more . gave a 5 worth 20

When you going to write the 3way story? I love hearing about Mom and aunt sex.

i wanna read more about him fucking his mother & his aunt being involved. maybe involve some of the lonely horny housewives from the spin & voga classes his mother & aunt attend. but would really like to read more chapters.

more please,that was hot

The ending implied a sequel. There really wasn't any other reason to add the line of him suggesting the threesome. Instead of ending the story, it opens it up. If you don't want to do a sequel, that's your prerogative. However, you might want to consider revising the story.

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Even just changing his request to wondering if they can do it in the bed next time would be better. It's pretty much implied this was not the only time they would fuck. Such a line would only confirm this, and such a scene would be rather redundant to what was in this story.

When is the 2nd chapter going to be available. Can't wait to read that one also!!

Mello, I find it interesting when people comment on things they themselves have never tried or done. A tongue circling your asshole plus a cock entering it - most people have never tried it. Note: Not to mention the preparation taken to correctly satisfy your partner.

I found many memories in this story. I only wish I had been endowed as Luke was.

I really liked it! 5*

I was surprised when I read your profile, I would have sworn you were female.

WELL DONE!

The anonymous comment that I responded to with the "LoL" title disappeared.

This is one of my highest-rated stories (4.60 rating / 364,606 views / 441 favorites). You are high if you think that I would take an anonymous douchebag's demand to stop posting stories.

How about you post a story first and If you can get a higher score than my lowest scoring story (5th Anniversary to Remember - 4.55), I'd consider it. I'm not very worried though since you would probably write your story in all caps.

What a boys dream

Character buildup and more plot-line are great, but that's no why I read Literotica stories.

I came twice reading your story and stroking my cock.

Thanks!

First of all, I love hearing the story from this point of view and from the mothers perspective. It makes her resignation to give in to her desires that much more arousing. The story is tremendous. Well written and descriptive. Please continue with the next instalment.

Mom and Aunt! You read my dirty mind. I love it.

We need this story to go on! Please continue this amazing take!

I was enjoying the story fine until the bullshit anal scene. Some huge dick and a little bit of spit for lube? No stretching? No. Fucking. Way. She would have screamed bloody murder, spun around and started nut punching the stupid bastard!! If he did manage to get in the pain would not have gone away, he would have ripped the fuck out of her and she would have been bleeding for days. Thats fucking reality. Last thing you need to do is give some dumbass hick the idea that he can up and ass fuck some girl with no planning or patience and she's gonna like it. Hell even with all that she may still hate it.

Don't write about shit you don't know. Hell guys shouldnt write about anal anyway,yeesh!

LOVE TO HAVE THE STORY OF THE THREESOME

Fantastic story

Looking forward to part 2 when Aunt gets involved

So the housewife is so free and can do whatever she wants to do, amazing. The development of the son's big cock is worth a good research.

Can't wait to read about Lara. lol Got to be good. Don't make us wait too long.

Moe please

That was a very hot story. I loved it and had to masturbate right away. I will probably masturbate again when I go into sleep.

The first time my son fucked me was so intense and then orgasm was wonderful.

Mary

m330g430@yahoo.com

when are posting the second part, with the aunt?

I loved the story. but I would like if wrote the second part to the story with mom son and aunt in it soon please. I would grade the story more then a five but the story just

stops if it had gone on in two more ch. I would be giving it a high rateing . please

write more I hope I have not affended you .

needs better spelling and clearer sentences but overall good

I'd love a sequel, see if he can go for a threesome?

Good story, any chance we can get a sequel featuring the threesome?

Multiple switches between past and present tenses.

Written in the first person, with mom as that person, so there's no way she'd know what he's thinking.

I really wish you'd find a better term for pussies, than using "camel toe" most of the time. It's an inelegant term that makes me think of a dirty, smelly animal's hooves and not of a woman's genitalia.

It is a raw gem of a story in need of a bit of cutting and polishing to make it shine.

I am looking forward to part 2 with the aunt getting involved. Perhaps a nice three-way with mom, son & auntie?

Sometimes it's better to let someone else edit for you. Everyone has a tendency to miss things or make mistakes when they do their own editing. You still have final approval and can accept or reject any thing they point out.

That said, it was a HOT story... I think I'd have let him fuck his mother conventionally before asking for his Aunt. Maybe letting his mother decide to bring his Aunt in?

cant wait to read what happens next

Holy shit dude! Congratulations on giving me the biggest hard on I've had in years. And, since I'm in my 70s, I know whereof I speak. I damned near ripped my cock off! We happen to be neighbors. I live in Madison "just down the road" from you.

definetly add the aunt for the next story!!

For my next story, I've got to make a mental note to use the Find & Replace feature in Microsoft Word so I don't have another Aunt Tara/Lana/Lara screwup.

Yes the story could have been better given a few small things and a slower narrative...

But this story as of itself is HOT, AWESOME and LOVELY....

Sometimes the feelings are there deep down, but in the spur of the moment, You dont care and just want to take a leap...

I guess that's what you were trying to show with the anal scene and the starting of the sex scene...

Can't wait for the second part, and the big tits of aunt Tara/Lana/Lara wrapped around his big dick...

Maybe you should have stuck with Tara for the name of Lucy's sister, as it would have reduced the chance of changing her name through the story. Second, while she might have caught where Luke was looking (out of the corner her her eye), she would not know what he was thinking -- but she could imagine, or hope what he was thinking. Third, there was a point in the story where you switched from past tense narrative (non-dialogue) to present tense narrative -- even doing it within one narrative sentence. Present tense dialogue is, of course, acceptable, but you need to watch the switch in the narrative portions -- where past tense works the best.

I hope you do not find these points picky, because this was a good story (even though I do not like anal). I hope that this will help you write an even better follow-up chapter (or two or more).

It was so hot, it had me thinking back to when my mother accidently fucked me when she was drunk .

Cool story curious if you continue with the aunt getting involved that would be hot :)

This was a hot story. Had all the right ingredients but needs proofing and editing. Great attempt though.

She never inserted the can up her ass. The only thing that went up her ass was her son's cock. That was slathered with spit and her pussy juice though.

Very good story. I really enjoyed how you "painted" the scenes. Great visuals. I agree with some of the other comments regarding shoving a Red Bull can up a woman's ass, essentially dry. In real life, that would be painful as hell.

You should probably read the other posts for the answers to your questions. But then again, you are anonymous so who cares.

Odd how the aunts name changed mid story. And how on earth did good old mom know what son was thinking. Every kind of sex was crammed into one short 2 page story and (in the story) a too short time period. And seriously the can part was a little far fetched. Lastly, what's with the million plus count? Who's playing games with the numbers?

Baxter's plan had 102,646 views.

I've put a thread up in the forums asking that same question.

My first story submitted was Baxter's Plan.

It was added on 1/17/14.

4.52 rating.

102,646587 views.

1,040 votes.

My new story was added about 48 hours ago.

4.62 rating.

150,340 views.

1,855 votes.

I was shocked at how fast those stats jumped up. My second and third story petered out around 50,000 views and half the votes. I wondered if this might be some kinda glitch.

This was the reply I got:

No real mystery. It's a Mom-Son story. It's the most popular genre within the most popular category on the site.

One of mine passed 200k views and 2000 votes in the first 24 hours.

how come in two days time the views counts to 1,27,000 plus and the vote counts goes beyond 1800 mark. The average viewer count on Literotica per day is not more than 30k and these figures are for the best stories I have read on here. Man, there is some problem with either Literotica or the scores are manipulated. Believe me, this story doesn't even comes near to those best stories.

The mother is essentially the narrator of the story. For example:

I didn't notice Luke eating cereal at the kitchen table but he definitely noticed me. As I stretched to reach for a breakfast bar from the top shelf, my son's eyes locked onto my ass.

That narration also applies to when she references her pert ass, or camel toe. If you notice, those parts are not in quotes when she is speaking aloud.

This story has potential but it appears like you were In a hurry and tried to wrap it up in as few pages as possible. A woman who go's from an accidental text to jamming a red bull can in her and screaming her sons name in a coupleof days? Too much too fast

The story is fun and sexy. The way it is told really makes it work very well. It is an exciting example of good erotica.

Good story, a couple of things to make it better:

1. When using the perspective of the mother, she likely wouldn't reference her pert ass, or call her pussy a camel toe. Takes away from the belief required to get emmersed in the story.

2. Again, this story is from the mothers perspective, so I'm not sure how she knows that her son is staring at her ass, what her son is thinking while doing so, etc.

3. As mentioned, anal without lube would be painful for anyone, anal with a monster dick as described would rip the mother's anus to shreds. That is what I pictured during that scene...trust me, it's worth the slowdown to get the lube, or at least to have some nearby, a quick pre-scene using lotion or coconut oil in her hair provides the props.

Not trying to be critical, but these things kept me from truly being able to enjoy an otherwise good story. Keep up the good work.