by Sharing4atime
I love the story and would like to hear more especialy how he plans to convince his wife I thought she would have taken a cleaver to him and would love to find out how he avoided that many thanks
It moved much too fast. There was little character development. Slow it down, backtrack a bit, and fill in the details.
If you're going to write fantasy, please do so, and if you want to write erotica, likewise. You've confused the two and the styles clash badly in your hand.
Yes it will be very interesting to see where you take this!
That place sounds like an escape to utopia.
If there is a place like this I'm in! The only utopia I have ever found is between my wife's legs and I go there as often as I can! :)
Thanks for writing!