All Comments on 'The Adventures of Lita Pt. 01'

Please flesh out the characters. Why are they there, why are they important. A troll emerges from a well and no-one seems surprised; why? Forget the sex issue for the moment and make your people likable, or at least real and understandable.

Keep writing.

You did a good job of portraying an adventuring party in early to mid-stage. While I got the well was connected to Undermountain (some sort of cave system) so things coming up might not be that strange, I do agree with the other commenter about fleshing out more. Which just being the first chapter, I'm sure will happen in the story as it continues