All Comments on 'The Audit'

Wow truly just wow I loved it please I beg of you make another chapter

If true, what a sad, shallow, cynical life we lead.

Some people are sad, shallow, and cynical.

They make the world go around, too.

Thank you for reading.

Part of me was disbelieving but reading it again we are all controlled in one way or another without knowing it. I hope Brenda and Beth are happy together. Could we have another chapter about the two of them please

(Ended a little abruptly, but, still, wonderful!)

Well written. I liked how the protagonist fought her darker impulses for a bit.

A prologue, from Elizabeth's point of view while being altered, would be great next chapter.

You are good with the story and this one was exemplary. Your writing is great as well albeit with some typos. Its unforced. I like how you have included a lot of sexiness without much in the way of a sex scene. This is a tough line to walk and you certainly wak it close to the edge that reads "not enough sex" but i think all in all it was balanced all the way through.

I'm enjoying these interconnected stories very much. I'm going to go back to your page and look for more. It might be helpful if you were to link them together in some sort of grouping as chapters or something.

I really enjoyed this story. definatly an original concept, that the main character was not forced into changing but offered something never before considered. Will certainly read any other offerings you might have submitted.