All Comments on 'The Barista Pt. 01'

So why wasn't it a white man seducing a black girl with daddy issues? And of course she had to get pregnant. I know you meant well but this scenario is so over used and has become banal at best. You write okay, try another subject, I think you'll be better received.

Love this story. I have a fetish for young white girls who can’t resist older blackmen and get addicted to being fucked by them.

Not bad at all!

Felt rushed. You could have drawn it out a lot more with a longer build up. It wasn't bad writing but it felt like you got over excited to get to the end. Learn to pace yourself a bit.