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All Comments on 'The Beauty of Buses'

by Jena121

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AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
Brilliant

Descriptive, vivid very real

AnonymousAnonymousabout 11 years ago
GET AN EDITOR

'Kig of Prussia,' 'Duffel,' 'corroded arteries' Had me cringing early on. The odd use of capital letters,'Commercial bus,' 'Steak,' 'Auburn hair,' was also annoying. You've got promise of being a story teller, but grammar is getting in the way.

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